Morning Madness - Can't Sleep

[Sho Money EMG]

Just another rough draft - call it an act of unorthodox patriotism
Shine flowing through like Fort Knox through ancient civilian paintings your given
Have faith when you listen - you'll never see the chemistry
Bourne to create a legacy - tryna gain memory in which will contain my identity
More of the positive less of the negativity meant to live and see
The capability of basic melody can be great with real intrigue
Remain tense at times of stress that I've confessed
Confide effects of timeless breath - no peaking behind the fence to find the nest
Take a walk in the wild side - welcome to the jungle
When fire breaches expect that when u tumble to exit with a struggle
Got dope fiends scratching and itching for that bundle
Got your whole team tha clap - prostitutes like inspiring diction in a huddle
Walk straight don't fix it if you stumble
It stings but if its a bumble be grateful if it didnt stung you
Or maybe sting is the way it's pronounced, I be lazy without taming my mouth
From saying out loud the wrong annunciation
I'm above the basics - I create my own tons of phrases through less concentration
It's fun to make shit, you should try it to
But I advise to you read the guide if you seek to find the truth that I've consumed
My mind can vroom, fly past in time lapse
With a few wise cracks - with more sly raps just over your head than a bypass of pedestrians in Iraq

[Sho Money EMG]

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It started off well to me with transitions to the next line etc., then towards the end it got abit more sporadic in terms of flow. I couldn't really get what you were talking about at times to be honest, here's an example:

It stings but if its a bumble be grateful if it didnt stung you
Or maybe sting is the way it's pronounced, I be lazy without taming my mouth
From saying out loud the wrong annunciation
^ Ok, but wat?

The closure seemed out of place to me as well. But you did have some cool lines here and there, the intro definitely caught my attention.

My mind can vroom, fly past in time lapse
^ Thought this was dope af.

The piece was cool enough but I thought it got worse, lazy even, towards the end. Remove fillers, organize your piece/thoughts and I think it would have been more coherent and better overall.