goofy rhyme for fellow lyricists

Pharaohs Army · 08-02-2014, 11:39 PM

so-i got my Neck Snapped by the Next Rapper who Said It Better.
my Metal Jacket of Heavy Armor did nothing to Impede Their Progress.
"go Easy On Me",
i said..
but Needless ta Say my Spleen was Flayed in the Meanest Way,
&when it was All Over my Organs Looked'as Cream Of Wheat.

JESODIST · 08-03-2014, 01:13 AM

ah-Yes i Rhyme for the Sake of Rhyming Bad,,

I hate you for this^ You got potential and are just hiding it.

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 01:29 AM

haha...
I know what you mean, but what i really mean is that over my time of learning how to rap I've come to appreciate Near-Rhymes, in vocals, rather than always trying to find the clean rhyme.
I'm still experimenting and my satirical tone is something that I fall back on. but i will post something "serious" here eventually when the mood strikes me

gitto138 · 08-03-2014, 06:53 AM

Don't be so harsh on the new customer services limited

dull boy · 08-03-2014, 07:36 AM

This was cool.

big baby · 08-03-2014, 10:37 AM

you remind me of wise ways not on drugs. the gut section was intriguing. keep it up. you and wiseways should collab.

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 02:54 PM

lol @ "not on drugs". okay i'll look him up

Fig · 08-03-2014, 03:25 PM

dope. sorry thats shit feed. but this is dope for its originality

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 08:25 PM

thanks i feel like i recognize your name from somewhere.

Alfred Kipling · 08-03-2014, 08:26 PM

This Was Goofy And Fun And Interesting

UnbornBuddha · 08-05-2014, 12:14 AM

I appreciate the involvement, however slight the inspiration. This piece is comical. It had a flair of pizzazz and the head lice line is funny. I do confess that as someone who likes to rhyme in such way I might be getting it, jk. Sometimes your rhyme scheme seems a bit off which throws of the flow a bit. But other than that, I think this was okay. This seemed more like a fun piece, than anything really serious. Although even this piece of lightheartedness should not be taken lightly when writing. Everything one writes one should put their entire heart in. Well that's what I think, you could disagree. But anyways, l also like the first 4 introductory lines because they have a pertinence to it that highlights the small things in life. Such as finding a new song, being enamored by it, and then listening to it so much one's perceptions of it begin to change. Keep writing.

Wise Wiggles · 08-05-2014, 09:08 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by big baby

you remind me of wise ways not on drugs. the gut section was intriguing. keep it up. you and wiseways should collab.

What makes you think I won't cut you?

Eŋg · 08-05-2014, 03:07 PM

lol, i enjoyed this. it felt like you were doing you, for the most part, and there's little else i could ask for. the rhythm was there. you had some interesting concepts and palpable humour. felt unserious in a liberating way. keep doing it.

08-02-2014, 11:39 PM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	goofy rhyme for fellow lyricists so-i got my Neck Snapped by the Next Rapper who Said It Better. my Metal Jacket of Heavy Armor did nothing to Impede Their Progress. "go Easy On Me", i said.. but Needless ta Say my Spleen was Flayed in the Meanest Way, &when it was All Over my Organs Looked'as Cream Of Wheat. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 07-13-2016 at 08:01 PM. Reason: kept ending

08-03-2014, 03:25 PM	#8
Fig Om Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 6,461 Battle Record: 8-16 Rep Power: 84181562	dope. sorry thats shit feed. but this is dope for its originality __________________ BIRDHORSE 8-15

08-03-2014, 01:13 AM	#2
JESODIST Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 309 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 976839	ah-Yes i Rhyme for the Sake of Rhyming Bad,, I hate you for this^ You got potential and are just hiding it.

08-03-2014, 01:29 AM	#3
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	haha... I know what you mean, but what i really mean is that over my time of learning how to rap I've come to appreciate Near-Rhymes, in vocals, rather than always trying to find the clean rhyme. I'm still experimenting and my satirical tone is something that I fall back on. but i will post something "serious" here eventually when the mood strikes me

08-03-2014, 06:53 AM	#4
gitto138 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Location: BITER Posts: 138 Battle Record: BITER Rep Power: 0	Don't be so harsh on the new customer services limited

08-03-2014, 07:36 AM	#5
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	This was cool.

08-03-2014, 02:54 PM	#7
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	lol @ "not on drugs". okay i'll look him up

08-03-2014, 08:25 PM	#9
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	thanks i feel like i recognize your name from somewhere.

08-03-2014, 08:26 PM	#10
Alfred Kipling Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2013 Posts: 11 Rep Power: 0	This Was Goofy And Fun And Interesting

08-05-2014, 12:14 AM	#11
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	I appreciate the involvement, however slight the inspiration. This piece is comical. It had a flair of pizzazz and the head lice line is funny. I do confess that as someone who likes to rhyme in such way I might be getting it, jk. Sometimes your rhyme scheme seems a bit off which throws of the flow a bit. But other than that, I think this was okay. This seemed more like a fun piece, than anything really serious. Although even this piece of lightheartedness should not be taken lightly when writing. Everything one writes one should put their entire heart in. Well that's what I think, you could disagree. But anyways, l also like the first 4 introductory lines because they have a pertinence to it that highlights the small things in life. Such as finding a new song, being enamored by it, and then listening to it so much one's perceptions of it begin to change. Keep writing.

08-05-2014, 03:07 PM	#13
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	lol, i enjoyed this. it felt like you were doing you, for the most part, and there's little else i could ask for. the rhythm was there. you had some interesting concepts and palpable humour. felt unserious in a liberating way. keep doing it.