Rayge vs. Mac {Rayge wins}

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@Rayge @Mac

[Maximus]

Here. 10 playa

[Mac]

yo

[Maximus]

Quickey for ur bitchass
.
.
shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
nothing you ever post is quotable, so get lost you sordid homo
you never dropped Fire...u only managed to beat him cos he no showed
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn
u should join da ultimate writers league & get schooled by vets, u wet back
but forget garbage in garbage out, we'll feed u dope shit & still expect thrash

[Mac]

fuck txt.

you can't even touch a Piano. and that's nothing new
Ray, if u wasnt blind youd notice no one is listening to you
what your trying to do. your always running fucking coward
you should stay quiet, Max, youll never reach that state of power
don't be friendly and give stuff. consider first the in n outs
taking in count you always giving keys.. wack ppl always in da house
immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards
you're no big deal. nigga, you dont even got genitals
i mean you're harsh as a shark & your body parts are all over medicines

[Sharp]

shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
liked the idea
da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
solid
nothing you ever post is quotable, so get lost you sordid homo
you never dropped Fire...u only managed to beat him cos he no showed
okay
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn
slick wp
u should join da ultimate writers league & get schooled by vets, u wet back
but forget garbage in garbage out, we'll feed u dope shit & still expect thrash
wasnt feeling too much

you can't even touch a Piano. and that's nothing new
Ray, if u wasnt blind youd notice no one is listening to you
I like where the nameflip came from, but the excecution wasn't all it could be
what your trying to do. your always running fucking coward
you should stay quiet, Max, youll never reach that state of power
This was a little predictable, but alright
don't be friendly and give stuff. consider first the in n outs
taking in count you always giving keys.. wack ppl always in da house
Great ammo, but again excecution was eh
immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards
lold
you're no big deal. nigga, you dont even got genitals
i mean you're harsh as a shark & your body parts are all over medicines
eh



Alright, Rayge took this pretty easily, but Mac's headed in the right direction. Keep at it, you're forming really good ideas now you just need to take that next step of execution and wording. I can elaborate more if need be but my vote's to rayge for a more consistent verse and better hits.

V/ Rayge

[Flow]

Originally Posted by Rayge

Quickey for ur bitchass
.
.
shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
Nice
da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
Nice
nothing you ever post is quotable, so get lost you sordid homo
you never dropped Fire...u only managed to beat him cos he no showed
OK
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn
OK
u should join da ultimate writers league & get schooled by vets, u wet back
but forget garbage in garbage out, we'll feed u dope shit & still expect thrash
Just a tad below OK

Originally Posted by Mac

fuck txt.

you can't even touch a Piano. and that's nothing new
Ray, if u wasnt blind youd notice no one is listening to you
Lol
what your trying to do. your always running fucking coward
you should stay quiet, Max, youll never reach that state of power
Ok
don't be friendly and give stuff. consider first the in n outs
taking in count you always giving keys.. wack ppl always in da house
You could of done alot better here
immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards
LOL Best so far from both battles for me
you're no big deal. nigga, you dont even got genitals
i mean you're harsh as a shark & your body parts are all over medicines
Mate you lost me

This is a tough one for me - Think Sharp Nine hits it on the head, Rayge takes this on a consistent verse where Mac you were struggling a bit with wording and delivery but you had decent LOLs which for me is usually where my votes lie....


Vote Rayge/

[RPK]

shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn

vs.

don't be friendly and give stuff. consider first the in n outs
taking in count you always giving keys.. wack ppl always in da house
immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards
Seemed like a concept you could see on 9gag


I thought this was closer than I expected. Mac had many complete misses that I didnt understand. In the end I have to give it to Rayge.
v/Rayge

[bleak]

Rayge had the blood type line and Missal n Hymn. The other lines weren't misses, those just stood out. A pretty consistent verse, the dropped fire line has been used.

Mac, the giving keys line could have been nice but you didn't deliver a heavy punch. The other lines weren't very good either. lords and cards does not rhyme.

immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards

lords/cards nope.

You have good concepts Mac, it just seems statementish.

V/Rayge

[Plot]

Im consistent with the voter so far. Rayge is the clear winner. Standouts being the AOB bloodtypes and the missal hymn bars. Some nice creativity there. Reall liked Macs Greencards/uno concept, his verse lacked somewhat in the wording tho. Good battle.

[Witty]

shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
lol nice
da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
Cool
nothing you ever post is quotable, so get lost you sordid homo
you never dropped Fire...u only managed to beat him cos he no showed
Not bad
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn
Nah
u should join da ultimate writers league & get schooled by vets, u wet back
but forget garbage in garbage out, we'll feed u dope shit & still expect thrash
Simple but not bad

vs

you can't even touch a Piano. and that's nothing new
Ray, if u wasnt blind youd notice no one is listening to you
Man you could have done so much more with this concept
what your trying to do. your always running fucking coward
you should stay quiet, Max, youll never reach that state of power
Nah
don't be friendly and give stuff. consider first the in n outs
taking in count you always giving keys.. wack ppl always in da house
Didn't understand this one
immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards
Lol pretty funny. wording hurt it though
you're no big deal. nigga, you dont even got genitals
i mean you're harsh as a shark & your body parts are all over medicines
I don't know what this means

Rayge takes this one, Mac had a few pretty cool concepts in there and he is definitely getting better all the time, he just needs to work on getting the most out of those concepts and work on his wording. Rayge is gonna be up there challenging at the top, soon enough I would think...he seems to be getting better all the time too, was feeling a lot of his verse this week...just needs to be more clever, less predictable, and I think he'll keep getting better.

Vote - Rayge

[Utmost]

Rayge
AOB Blood
missles n hymm

Mac
opener
green cards

both coulda been better executed

v/Rayge, had lotb with the hymms joint, lows in his verse were better than the lows in Macs. Mac had nice stuff at the beginning but lost steam and came off flat for the rest of verse

[Origin]

shouldnt have joined this site, now u'll bleed profusely. This scrub is so shook
its AOB.....& after this u'll need blood donations from one of those groups
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn
vs.

immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards

Rayge got this one decisively. Mac's green card line was his best but it didn't rhyme and the mexican/green card/uno lines are played. I've seen those said to Uno Lavos in like three different battles.

My vote is for Rayge.

[Hollywood]

Ermac, Missal n Hymn

vs.

green cards

decent read, Rayge did just enough

Mac could've taken it w/ more lines like his UNO one

V/Rayge

[~RustyGunZ~]

da heavy hits from my iron fists will make your torso fall flat
don't care who u ermac....i'll beat u worse than that dude in mortal kombat
da bazooka'll leave u penetrated with rockets, u're too crippled to win
so i aint talking prayerbooks or songbooks but ive got a Missal n Hymn

aob line eh. missal n hymn was nice. closer was not tight.

vs

immigrant bitch, stop seekin the american dream & prayin to the lords
i would play UNO with you.. but you'd just steal all the green cards

ray charles line doesnt really work since he was popular as fuck lmao. idkif his name is really max so nah. giving out keys was a cool idea that u kind of butchered. DEAD @ green cards. lmao. closer sucked. the green card line brought the lulz the rest was lacking

v/rayge