Beretta vs. megatron {Beretta wins}

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@Beretta @megatron

[megatron]

Dead...10

[The youngest boss.]

ready with 12, brah. add one, cool

[The youngest boss.]

u ain't never touched a gun in ya life so u're not a crook clearly
but if u ever did.. u'd be Deadpool in a mag out faster than any comic book series
i'm a boss like Tony Soprano so the piece on my hip stays loaded w/ ammo
& i'm handin out headshots..
so when i pack the can, pop off a lid & leave ya Skoal open.. it ain't smokeless tobacco
Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
& ya bitch? i fucked her all in ya crib & left that wet snatch demolished
i'm talkin bedroom, livingroom, bathroom..
& there was enough Action in the kitchen to rival that chef/rapper Bronson's
& fuck a gun, one swing'll smash this brittle fag's face in
i'll just snuff 'em w/ a fist full of rings.. & put more gold to his grill than Trinidad James's
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles

[megatron]

You not built for this, young boy talkin big shit but he dumb frail
I mastered the art of battlin, here ur chances are slim, ill make him split wit one 12
Don't ever tell this hoe some shit, cuz when he around the cops he can't close his lips
Yu can die quick bitch, no quidditch but its game over when I catch this golden snitch
I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death
Fool u ont pop tools, load glocks or hold chrome dezzies
Hoe stop u ont let off shots, if u got a Beretta then its an old Chevy
I don't even have to spray heat, my squad deep and they stay killin
If he test me u Macy a parade of my dogs eatin this nigga like thanksgiving
You don't wanna box guy, I go ham after I down a gram of my spinach
If one land ur finished, I pop eyes n that a leave retina damaged condition


R.I.P

[~RustyGunZ~]

Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
& ya bitch? i fucked her all in ya crib & left that wet snatch demolished
i'm talkin bedroom, livingroom, bathroom..
& there was enough Action in the kitchen to rival that chef/rapper Bronson's
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles

opener just didnt hit for me, as a dipper i used a crack/skoal tin concept before but it's cool otherwise, fist full of rings was cool but wasnt really quote worthy, overall solid verse though. eisenhart bar was flames

vs

I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death

the macy concept was cool but seen it once, and it was just worded awkwardly. the first 2 bars were okay but again you word shit really poorly. overall eh, seemed rushed if you're usually better

v/beretta pretty easy

[Sn00p]

Up over noshows.

[Allen Knight]

Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles


vs

I don't even have to spray heat, my squad deep and they stay killin
If he test me u Macy a parade of my dogs eatin this nigga like thanksgiving

V/beretta, he had alot more solid bars that hit luther p joint was dope, the rest were good jabs, meg has the idea
just work on wording ur bars stronger an use more concepts like the macy bar it was cool but beretta takes this.

[Dominate]

u ain't never touched a gun in ya life so u're not a crook clearly
but if u ever did.. u'd be Deadpool in a mag out faster than any comic book series
cool, wp is solid.
i'm a boss like Tony Soprano so the piece on my hip stays loaded w/ ammo
& i'm handin out headshots..
so when i pack the can, pop off a lid & leave ya Skoal open.. it ain't smokeless tobacco
the 'skoal' wp in itself was good but all the stuff that preceded it to try to beef up the wp actually detracted from it imo
Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
nice. never seen a Eisenhart line before
& ya bitch? i fucked her all in ya crib & left that wet snatch demolished
i'm talkin bedroom, livingroom, bathroom..
& there was enough Action in the kitchen to rival that chef/rapper Bronson's
had to google to get reference. The wp here wasn't as good but the punch was better. Decent
& fuck a gun, one swing'll smash this brittle fag's face in
i'll just snuff 'em w/ a fist full of rings.. & put more gold to his grill than Trinidad James's
okayyyyy... not bad but neither the punch or the wp did anything for me here
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles
good nameplay


good verse, solid wp throughout. Would like to see a bit more emphasis on punch concepts over "I'll kill you" ones, but this is a small thing.

You not built for this, young boy talkin big shit but he dumb frail
I mastered the art of battlin, here ur chances are slim, ill make him split wit one 12
cool personal. Seen slim lines a lot before, usually flipped with Eminem stuff... but the split with one 12 was highly relevant given that HE changed the amount you were gonna drop, so.... good
Don't ever tell this hoe some shit, cuz when he around the cops he can't close his lips
Yu can die quick bitch, no quidditch but its game over when I catch this golden snitch
seen exact same concept once before, sorry. I thought it was dope the first time but yeah... didn't have much impact a second time
I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death
OK wp concept. Having those multies compromised your wording here
Fool u ont pop tools, load glocks or hold chrome dezzies
Hoe stop u ont let off shots, if u got a Beretta then its an old Chevy
cool. Simple, but not bad.
I don't even have to spray heat, my squad deep and they stay killin
If he test me u Macy a parade of my dogs eatin this nigga like thanksgiving
nah seen a ton of macy lines before
You don't wanna box guy, I go ham after I down a gram of my spinach
If one land ur finished, I pop eyes n that a leave retina damaged condition
seen pop eyes lines before.... multies were good here


Got beretta taking this fairly comfortably with fresher wp and more creative lines generally

v/ Beretta

[El Muffin]

u ain't never touched a gun in ya life so u're not a crook clearly
but if u ever did.. u'd be Deadpool in a mag out faster than any comic book series
(ok wp not a fan of how you tied it in tho..id have to say)
i'm a boss like Tony Soprano so the piece on my hip stays loaded w/ ammo
& i'm handin out headshots..
so when i pack the can, pop off a lid & leave ya Skoal open.. it ain't smokeless tobacco
(the execution was great here..but where im from it isnt pronounced skull..or nething close to it..maybe thats my fault but its true)
Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
(dope. similar to my eisenhower line u asshole..but dope nevertheless)
& ya bitch? i fucked her all in ya crib & left that wet snatch demolished
i'm talkin bedroom, livingroom, bathroom..
& there was enough Action in the kitchen to rival that chef/rapper Bronson's
(didnt get this unfortunately)
& fuck a gun, one swing'll smash this brittle fag's face in
i'll just snuff 'em w/ a fist full of rings.. & put more gold to his grill than Trinidad James's
(not a fan of this one)
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles
(cool closer)

You not built for this, young boy talkin big shit but he dumb frail
I mastered the art of battlin, here ur chances are slim, ill make him split wit one 12
(nice..very overlooked line i like it)
Don't ever tell this hoe some shit, cuz when he around the cops he can't close his lips
Yu can die quick bitch, no quidditch but its game over when I catch this golden snitch
(decent)
I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death
(a little overextended here..maybe its just my interpretation..but to each his own)
Fool u ont pop tools, load glocks or hold chrome dezzies
Hoe stop u ont let off shots, if u got a Beretta then its an old Chevy
(lol nice)
I don't even have to spray heat, my squad deep and they stay killin
If he test me u Macy a parade of my dogs eatin this nigga like thanksgiving
(ok)
You don't wanna box guy, I go ham after I down a gram of my spinach
If one land ur finished, I pop eyes n that a leave retina damaged condition
(niiiiiiiice nameplay and tie in..of course youve seen pop eyes lines but he tied in the np nicely)

iono bout you guys but i honestly have megatron winning this..beretta had a few obscure references ..those are hit n miss..sometimes the majority will get them sometimes not..hopefully im the minority for your sake..

but v/megatron..

cool read fellas

[Dominate]

Amending my vote bc I did miss the nameplay in megatron's closer - it's quite nice with that element. I still have Beretta taking it, but it's closer than I said. Beretta had Eisenhart and the closer, megatron had his opener and closer... but I think beretta's other lines were a little stronger. Sorry tron, ur verse was more impressive than what I said before.

[bleak]

Not exactly a landslide, they both had 2 standouts. Beretta's being Eisenhart (Even though I've seen something like this) and his closer, although it could have been made a lil more clearer. It still hit, and I liked the lines that didn't stand out too. You had pretty clean execution, which helped the couple concepts that didn't have power behind them without it.

Tron had his opener and closer, which were nice. Honestly I probably wouldn't have noticed the thought behind the first punch, had muff not said something. Still tho, other than those 2 the rest weren't deliver very well. I can see the concepts, and how you probably wanted to employ them. The way they stand could have been executed cleaner. A decent verse, but it read like a rushed key.

V/Beretta

[Hollywood]

Eisenhart, neutron

vs.

Macy, Retina

preferring the first 2, V/Beretta

[Vinzr]

u ain't never touched a gun in ya life so u're not a crook clearly
but if u ever did.. u'd be Deadpool in a mag out faster than any comic book series
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles

vs

You not built for this, young boy talkin big shit but he dumb frail
I mastered the art of battlin, here ur chances are slim, ill make him split wit one 12
You don't wanna box guy, I go ham after I down a gram of my spinach
If one land ur finished, I pop eyes n that a leave retina damaged condition

Close one here boys...personally i thought both had their fair share of hard hits but outside of those i thought Beretta actually had the more consistent verse, i felt he had more hits than megatron and when it comes down to the lotb i gotta give it to berratta's closer, that shit was dope i thought

v/ Beretta

[Mac]

u ain't never touched a gun in ya life so u're not a crook clearly
but if u ever did.. u'd be Deadpool in a mag out faster than any comic book series
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles

vs

I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death
You not built for this, young boy talkin big shit but he dumb frail
I mastered the art of battlin, here ur chances are slim, ill make him split wit one 12

quoted 2 best bars, considering beretta's are better than megatron. beretta came up way more consistent with solid hits, megatron was lacking consistency and the hits didnt land like they should, even tho the 12 line was cool. that's why my vote goes for beretta.

[RPK]

Leatherface w/ metal blades, grab a knife & carve thru ya spleen
put ya organs inside of jars right after takin out ya Eisenhart like Luther P.
throw a right & K.O. this rookie cuz my hand's remarkable..
so if u thought i'd slack cuz u're Neutron.. irony, ya still gettin smashed to particles

vs

I keep my Nina n we pull gory crimes, guns spit faster then Corey lines n destroy necks
The outcomes never Goodwin shorty shines, even his 40 times couldn't help u avoid death
You don't wanna box guy, I go ham after I down a gram of my spinach
If one land ur finished, I pop eyes n that a leave retina damaged condition

These were my favorite punches from both. This was BOTW IMO. I didn't like some of Beretta's wordplay. It seemed to come off as a little forced to me, but it may be the way I say it. Action Bronson and Trinidad James were mehish to me.
I would have quoted megas opener if the rhyme hadnt been forced. I thought that the quidditch and Macys were alright but not that cool.
I have to go against the grain and vote for Tron.
V/Tron