random thoughts

Dove Dozer · 12-11-2013, 03:07 PM

This just spawned off something i was writing and i kept going with it. Holler.

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Everything i spits cursed, verse like a chainsaw..
With so much flow as it soothes let the rain pour..
Ya know that its soldier approved, cause i aim for..
Marksman with the motion and grooves, when the flames all..
Liquid.. floatin as smoothe. An insane brawl
In my head, i cope with the blues. Im degranged. y'all probably
Have a stroke from the news.. that my game's on
Check my flow, the ocean it moves, cause my brain's raw..
Messed up Soaked in the hues everyday's all
Good so ill coast and ill cruise, get my blaze on...
always stay focused and couth.. when i was raised wrong..
I never really broke from the truth, but i stay strong..

Mael · 12-12-2013, 04:09 AM

It was decent. Multies were pretty simplistic. Mentioning your flow repeatedly doesn't help with your actual flow, however. Would recommend you make it longer next time, and preferably stick to a specific topic. Overall, good effort. Keep elevating.

12-11-2013, 03:07 PM	#1
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	random thoughts This just spawned off something i was writing and i kept going with it. Holler. ______________________ Everything i spits cursed, verse like a chainsaw.. With so much flow as it soothes let the rain pour.. Ya know that its soldier approved, cause i aim for.. Marksman with the motion and grooves, when the flames all.. Liquid.. floatin as smoothe. An insane brawl In my head, i cope with the blues. Im degranged. y'all probably Have a stroke from the news.. that my game's on Check my flow, the ocean it moves, cause my brain's raw.. Messed up Soaked in the hues everyday's all Good so ill coast and ill cruise, get my blaze on... always stay focused and couth.. when i was raised wrong.. I never really broke from the truth, but i stay strong.. __________________ Last edited by Dove Dozer; 12-11-2013 at 03:12 PM.

12-12-2013, 04:09 AM	#2
Mael Almighty Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 580 Battle Record: 2-3 Rep Power: 428844	It was decent. Multies were pretty simplistic. Mentioning your flow repeatedly doesn't help with your actual flow, however. Would recommend you make it longer next time, and preferably stick to a specific topic. Overall, good effort. Keep elevating.