Common Property

Illume · 12-02-2013, 04:21 PM

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Split · 12-05-2013, 07:33 AM

kind of bland in its scope and lyrical delivery. no quotes "popped" out at me. I liked how you weren't verbose. Refreshing. You should have come out and said something though.

Good rhymes but it didn't seem very challenging for you. I think the two opening bars was the strongest thematically, mechanically, rhythmically. Keep writing.

12-02-2013, 04:21 PM	#1
Illume Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 145 Rep Power: 671780	Common Property Deleted Last edited by Illume; 12-03-2016 at 10:37 AM. Reason: Put feed in

12-05-2013, 07:33 AM	#2
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899398	kind of bland in its scope and lyrical delivery. no quotes "popped" out at me. I liked how you weren't verbose. Refreshing. You should have come out and said something though. Good rhymes but it didn't seem very challenging for you. I think the two opening bars was the strongest thematically, mechanically, rhythmically. Keep writing. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com