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Old 11-16-2013, 01:24 PM   #1
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Hi, and what? I don't rhyme enough? Midas touch minus the shiny stuff. Whiny fuck crying, yup. Whyyyyy, and stuff. Said stuff twice, must not want hype. Must be dumb. Guy's a cunt sized runt type. Blunt knives shoved in your slut wife's rump. Untie tongues with my punchline guns. I have vertigo while typing. It's not a line, I'm 'bout to twirl and go. Exciting how I worded those enticing verses/flows and rhyming. Murder notes with writing perfect prose for eyeing. Serpico's vagina. I think of words that rhyme then merge the flow behind 'em. Nothing's got a purpose, nope, just sighing on the surface. Close the blinds and search your soul for life and burn the holes you hide in.

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I'm a piece of myself. A part of a whole I released from and fell. They say part of me died, but that's dramatic effect. That part of me's alive, it's just wrapped in what's left. So much past I regret. So much I wish I hadn't confessed. Just imagine it's best, don't ever let happiness crest because of what's happening. Death. I could cry at any minute. Sensory overload. I could die at any minute. Sensing it's close to close. Life ain't really living, since I'm a hopeless soul. That was fun to write. It's been years since I took a nap when sun was bright. I only sleep when it dims. It never goes down, it just ceased to exist. I've got no reasons to live, not when death is what's eventual. Breath is what is pitiful. Having to wrestle through the living room to settle in the ending tomb. I wanna watch her summer dress blossom into nothingness that's rotten. I'm on that bummer-esque conscious of Hunter S. Thompson. Redundant vet who's stalling his plunge to death's embalming.

I'm such an abrasive son of a sadist.
Waterfalls don't run, T-Boz, HOW THE FUCK CAN I CHASE 'EM?!
Running in place when in public. And naked.
Touching my privates. Plucking my eyelids.
Keep smoking dope when my lung's in a vice grip.
I'm not proud, but I pretend to my friends.
Pretend I have friends on the internet. WIN.
Real talk. Lingo out dated. People out dating
while you limbo 'round naked in a little house waiting
to get singled out. Gonna get me a Harley.
Grow a big beard. Rape Jenny McCarthy.
And Kelly Bundy, 'cause I'm really ugly.
Be friends with Chris Hardwick, call him my little buddy.

Anti-lock rhymes with camera cropped, which is what happened to me in my picture with Danial Tosh. We fuck on the weekends, but he's such an elitist over achiever.

NOBODY CARES NOBODY CARES NOBODY CARES. No one. Fucking. Cares. Momma's on pills. Daddy's on sill's of the window. Indo smoke fills the reflection of my past when doing drugs seemed sad. Before doing drugs killed dad and doing drugs killed dad to the son I just had. Doing drugs lol Such a power phrase. Just the way we were raised. JUST SAY NO. That was a Pepsi commercial. I LEARNED IT FROM YOU, OKAY?! Meanwhile, I can smell the weed smoke. I say it and it sounds so dramatic, but I never found it to matter. We accept what's presented. Never question existence. Then knowledge was exciting. I'M SO ENLIGHTENED. Now my conscious is dying 'cause I'm lost in this mindless thought of deciphering life's inner science. Crazy as fuck. Only crazy is maybe just awake from the stuff keeping you lazy, but... not suicidal. I'm not suicidal 'cause MY life sucks, I'm suicidal 'cause all life's fucked.

If I focused my opus would rival my opponents. Write only lines known'ta get shine. Shown it. Been showered with compliments from honest kids. Been empowered with confidence from iconic scripts. Just a new phase I'm going through, a new page I'm turning to. Metaphors are gay, but they sound so beautiful. They let you make your own interpretation for what is suitable. My drive for perfection is dried up and exit. I don't ever try to impress 'em, I just type what's

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Old 11-16-2013, 05:04 PM   #2
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I liked the tboz line. Stay up demon.
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Old 11-16-2013, 07:08 PM   #3
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this was more like it. pretty cool. how long does it take you write a piece like this? seems like a stream of consciousness that you type up just as fast as im typing this sentence right now
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Old 11-16-2013, 08:40 PM   #4
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Obv garbage.
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