Netcees  

Go Back   Netcees > Forum > Open Mic Section
Register FAQ Community Calendar Today's Posts Search

User Tag List

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 04-13-2013, 11:42 PM   #1
Void
Senior Member
 
Void's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Posts: 221




Rep Power: 0
Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void
Default A Nod to Pupils of Ember

The picture's far too big to look at, kid. Your eyes won't open wide enough.
And you're constantly surrounded by the swirling stream of what is and what was.
Well, we've all made our predictions, but the truth still isn't out.
But if you want to see the future go and stare into a cloud.
And keep trying to find your way out of that maze of memories.
It all sort of looks familiar, until you get up close, then it's different, clearly.
But each time you turn a corner you're right back where you were.
And your only hope is that forgetting might make a door appear.
Is it your fear of being buried that makes you so afraid to speak?
An avalanche of opinions, like the one that fell that I'm now underneath.
It was my voice that moved the first rock, and I would do it all again.
I mean, it's cool if you keep quiet... but I like singing.
So I'll be holding my note and stomping, and strumming, and feeling so very lucky.
And there is nothing I know except a lifetime's one moment. And wishing will just leave you empty.
So you can try to live in darkness, but you will never shake the light.
No, it will greet you every morning. Make you more aware with its absence at night.
When you're wrapped up in your blankets, baby, that comfortable cocoon.
But I've seen the day of your awakening, boy, and it's coming soon.
So go ahead and lose yourself in liquor, and you can praise the clouded mind.
But it isn't what you're thinking, no. It's the course of history, your position in line.
You're just a piece of the puzzle, so I think you'd better find your place.
And don't go blaming your knowledge on some fruit you ate.
Because there's been a great deal of discussion, yes, about the properties of man.
I mean, animal or angel, you were carved from bone but your heart is just sand.
And the wind is going to scatter it, and cover everything with love
So if it makes you happy, momma, then keep kneeling, but I'm standing up.
Void is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 04-16-2013, 11:13 AM   #2
IamBenT
SuPreaM Lyricyst
 
IamBenT's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: San Antonio, TX
Posts: 704
Battle Record: 9-6



Rep Power: 412358
IamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant futureIamBenT has a brilliant future
Default

Beautiful, hopeful, nostalgic and on some spoken word type vibe which I thought was cool, once I accepted that I could deal with the long bars lol but your metaphors are nice and imagery is real cool, an enjoyable read, people need to stop sleeping
__________________
A.bove T.he R.est
IamBenT|Genocide|MikeWrecka|Objective|Vulgar|Witty |Rawn MacDon
IamBenT is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 04-19-2013, 05:05 PM   #3
Void
Senior Member
 
Void's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Posts: 221




Rep Power: 0
Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void Void
Default

This might make it easier. Skip ahead to 1:50... if you want, and shit.

Void is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 04-19-2013, 09:45 PM   #4
Wise Wiggles
nok Su kow
 
Wise Wiggles's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,505
Battle Record: 1-1



Rep Power: 51788022
Wise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant futureWise Wiggles has a brilliant future
Default

I'm gonna read this fully sometime soon

this was crazy
__________________
"black as midnight..black as pitch
blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

Last edited by Wise Wiggles; 04-20-2013 at 10:30 PM.
Wise Wiggles is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 04-20-2013, 01:35 AM   #5
PancakeBrah
SOBER
 
PancakeBrah's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 12,480
Battle Record: 2-5


Champed
- AOWL Season 2

Rep Power: 85899407
PancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond repute
Default

Amy in the White Coat >>>>>>>>>>>>>>

It catches me off guard every time I hear 'First Day of My Life' in that one random commercial nowadays. Makes me feel old.
__________________
Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder
PancakeBrah is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 04-22-2013, 02:06 AM   #6
Zombie
Senior Member
 
Zombie's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 125
Battle Record: 5-0


Champed
- Art of Writing League

Rep Power: 2645340
Zombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant futureZombie has a brilliant future
Default

The pictures far too big
Zombie is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is On

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 12:13 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2025, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
User Alert System provided by Advanced User Tagging (Lite) - vBulletin Mods & Addons Copyright © 2025 DragonByte Technologies Ltd.
Google+