Master Of Arts

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 01:56 AM

I take charge on my mystical quest with every syllable said it's hard to picture it's visual depth...
Faced with lifes difficult test it is correct I'm vividly blessed although u might think I'm possessed...
considered a threat, with a chiselled defense I compose biblical text...
With a physical sense, that's capable of tearing thru ur mitchell an ness...
If u confess, u won't have to deal with having to live with regret...
While ur playing with ur mythical fictional friend I'm out shining from my driven success...
I carry the cross in various sorts, from hanging off my neck to across my leg...
Sometimes I'm a nauseous wreck, often
minds inside a gauntlet set to contain my force, I'm bred to withstand any false contempt...
I can torch against any course u set till I'm more commenced...
Have all these vets forfeit, yes. I'm a legend in the game...
With a devilish rage embedded in my brain if ever I'm engaged...
If u step into the paint don't expect it to be made...
In a domestic state, with a better taste for content in every single page...
Master of arts, with the passion to react in the dark if i'm attacked or I'm harmed...
As the chapters are captured I start to involve the wrath of a god...
It's nothin I stuff em thru a garbage disposal an cut em up, I organdone u...
shank or carve the sharpest bone thru ur arm n throat n give em more wisdom than barnes n noble...

Mr. J · 10-13-2013, 03:55 AM

Ill admit you have skill as well regardless of how you take my criticism I suggest you chill
there's always room for improvement and you need little
but you should still approach every piece with an objective
yours is showcasing your strengths and the beginning of this is smooth
but you try to keep that edge too close and it helps and doesn't at times
the way you do it in your head is different from its written entirety
so some things can be moved around you'll see if you were where I am
keep it up

e11even · 10-13-2013, 09:31 AM

very swag n flow and pretty tight. It was good, but it was almost like you were rewriting the same single premise with every line.... over and over...

Overall it was cool, but I think it should have more attention-grabbing punches in there... something thought provoking or provocatively offensive lol...
I liked your effort and lyrical consistency and I look forward to more joints from you.

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 03:28 PM

Thanks to both.

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 06:15 PM

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=25016

Ghost1 · 10-13-2013, 09:03 PM

Stopped reading after u used the word mythical twice. Lol. U fucking suck.

CopyPat · 10-13-2013, 11:08 PM

you can flow man, its solid rhyming.. the content just didn't really do anything for me though..i just found myself reading it and not really caring what was being said... then all of a sudden i was done and i didnt even know what it was about... like it was just boring. if the scheming was absolutely retarded then that woulda helped but it was just average really so there wasn't alot here. p.s. i been quickly reading alot of ur recent posts on my phone or whatever so not feeding but i haven minded any of them. that one where EVERYONE was hating on u i actually liked quite a bit lol.. so whatever, im not battler tho so that may be why, but yeah i thought That one was better than this one. u have skills, u just need to try a bit harder.. i have that problem too, alot do. just being honest, stay up

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 11:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rocket Ninja Pirate Slayer

Stopped reading after u used the word mythical twice. Lol. U fucking suck.

Mythical & mystical are diff words u worthless piece of trash

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 11:46 PM

Btw thnx @CopyPat, yeah speaking of haters. Look below ur post lol

Sho Money EMG · 10-22-2013, 11:26 PM

Up

veritas · 10-23-2013, 09:09 AM

PEEP GAME HOMEY, SOME OF THAT SEEMED LIKE CONVENIENT RHYMES FOR RHYMES SAKE. YOU DO GOT SKILLS THOUGH. I SUGGEST PRACTICING THE BALANCE BETWEEN RHYME AND CONTENT WITH A TOPICAL/ MESSAGE TYPE OF PIECE...I WILL BE LOOKING OUT.

10-13-2013, 01:56 AM	#1
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Master Of Arts I take charge on my mystical quest with every syllable said it's hard to picture it's visual depth... Faced with lifes difficult test it is correct I'm vividly blessed although u might think I'm possessed... considered a threat, with a chiselled defense I compose biblical text... With a physical sense, that's capable of tearing thru ur mitchell an ness... If u confess, u won't have to deal with having to live with regret... While ur playing with ur mythical fictional friend I'm out shining from my driven success... I carry the cross in various sorts, from hanging off my neck to across my leg... Sometimes I'm a nauseous wreck, often minds inside a gauntlet set to contain my force, I'm bred to withstand any false contempt... I can torch against any course u set till I'm more commenced... Have all these vets forfeit, yes. I'm a legend in the game... With a devilish rage embedded in my brain if ever I'm engaged... If u step into the paint don't expect it to be made... In a domestic state, with a better taste for content in every single page... Master of arts, with the passion to react in the dark if i'm attacked or I'm harmed... As the chapters are captured I start to involve the wrath of a god... It's nothin I stuff em thru a garbage disposal an cut em up, I organdone u... shank or carve the sharpest bone thru ur arm n throat n give em more wisdom than barnes n noble... __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-13-2013, 03:55 AM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Ill admit you have skill as well regardless of how you take my criticism I suggest you chill there's always room for improvement and you need little but you should still approach every piece with an objective yours is showcasing your strengths and the beginning of this is smooth but you try to keep that edge too close and it helps and doesn't at times the way you do it in your head is different from its written entirety so some things can be moved around you'll see if you were where I am keep it up __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-13-2013, 09:31 AM	#3
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	very swag n flow and pretty tight. It was good, but it was almost like you were rewriting the same single premise with every line.... over and over... Overall it was cool, but I think it should have more attention-grabbing punches in there... something thought provoking or provocatively offensive lol... I liked your effort and lyrical consistency and I look forward to more joints from you. __________________ Ahem.

10-13-2013, 03:28 PM	#4
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Thanks to both. __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-13-2013, 06:15 PM	#5
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=25016 __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-13-2013, 11:08 PM	#7
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	you can flow man, its solid rhyming.. the content just didn't really do anything for me though..i just found myself reading it and not really caring what was being said... then all of a sudden i was done and i didnt even know what it was about... like it was just boring. if the scheming was absolutely retarded then that woulda helped but it was just average really so there wasn't alot here. p.s. i been quickly reading alot of ur recent posts on my phone or whatever so not feeding but i haven minded any of them. that one where EVERYONE was hating on u i actually liked quite a bit lol.. so whatever, im not battler tho so that may be why, but yeah i thought That one was better than this one. u have skills, u just need to try a bit harder.. i have that problem too, alot do. just being honest, stay up __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

10-13-2013, 11:46 PM	#9
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Btw thnx @CopyPat, yeah speaking of haters. Look below ur post lol __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-22-2013, 11:26 PM	#10
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Up __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack