Colour of Foundation - AOWL Topical

symetrik · 10-28-2013, 07:18 PM

Here's a piece that won by no-show in the AOWL, so I'm looking for some feedback since it didn't get much. Much love.

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(hey, wake up.)
you ever wondered where your blue eyes came from?
I met your mother back in nineteen eighty-one.

(wake up)
I was fifteen and dollar-less,
less interested in listening to lectures then to lick her tits,
we'd hook up near the outhouse where the scholar's shit

(wake up!)
trench war politics, bricks to keep the stench in,
high school hiding spot, where kids would learn to French kiss,
and sip up off of the liquor drinks to stagger from establishment,
romanticizing sex with every chick they've ever had it with...

(is that bottle empty?)
"frantic" fits, you could say we moved a little fast,
addiction triggered relapse like a selfish ass,
though no one knew the grind like her pelvis had.
double line, tight lips, flip to see who tells her dad.

(someone call 911)
I let her have.

(hurry!)
nine months later, the trauma took you and your mum's life,
you were christened on the outskirts of a dump site.
I sympathize with wolves when we scream at moons.

(I don't feel a pulse.)
I'll see you soon.

10-28-2013, 07:18 PM	#1
symetrik Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 709 Battle Record: 5-7 Rep Power: 12429299	Colour of Foundation - AOWL Topical Here's a piece that won by no-show in the AOWL, so I'm looking for some feedback since it didn't get much. Much love. ---------- (hey, wake up.) you ever wondered where your blue eyes came from? I met your mother back in nineteen eighty-one. (wake up) I was fifteen and dollar-less, less interested in listening to lectures then to lick her tits, we'd hook up near the outhouse where the scholar's shit (wake up!) trench war politics, bricks to keep the stench in, high school hiding spot, where kids would learn to French kiss, and sip up off of the liquor drinks to stagger from establishment, romanticizing sex with every chick they've ever had it with... (is that bottle empty?) "frantic" fits, you could say we moved a little fast, addiction triggered relapse like a selfish ass, though no one knew the grind like her pelvis had. double line, tight lips, flip to see who tells her dad. (someone call 911) I let her have. (hurry!) nine months later, the trauma took you and your mum's life, you were christened on the outskirts of a dump site. I sympathize with wolves when we scream at moons. (I don't feel a pulse.) I'll see you soon.