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Old 09-26-2013, 05:47 PM   #1
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So close but yet so far away, to scarred to stay
Why go to church where you're charged to pray?
Its hard to say whether my past is forgiven.
A Blasphemous sentence; ask and its given.
Fake as shit! So I'll decide my own fate and split,
if you follow the priest, don't take your kids.
Being raped and kicked can make a child turn violent
why does talkin bout molested kids makes a crowd turn silent?
And I'm the bad guy? you're too blind for truth!
See these mindfull youths turn to crime for loot,
Then kill kids at schools when its time to shoot.
The past, its haunted. These Demons mask your conscience
Then we pass the gauntlet, murdering kids who act obnoxious.
fuck a gang life, kids we all livin the same strifes
You talk about hard livin, but life's what you make it, right?
Man I stay guilty like a demon sage built me,
Don't blame a child who was raised filthy..
...I spit heat so ill let these flames kill me.
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Old 10-01-2013, 10:41 AM   #2
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fuck a gang life, kids we all livin the same strifes
You talk about hard livin, but life's what you make it, right?
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This is a good fuckin drop. The most underrated writer here imo. Your pieces are always packed with raw emotions that make me wanna get up and do something to change myself for the better. This piece was intense to say the least. It brought up the problems with society like look the other way and the problems will go away but that just won't happen. This kinda reminded me of an updated version of The Message by Grandmaster Flash. Dope JW.
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Old 10-01-2013, 10:44 AM   #3
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Its hard to say whether my past is forgiven.
A Blasphemous sentence; ask and its given.

raw

And I'm the bad guy? you're too blind for truth!
See these mindfull youths turn to crime for loot,
Then kill kids at schools when its time to shoot.

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nice piece. Great read son/flow
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