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WEEK 2: Mac 1-0 VS TOP iLL DRAGSTER 1-0 TOP ILL WINS
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10-09-2020, 02:01 PM
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10-09-2020, 03:30 PM
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let's goo 12 good luck
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10-09-2020, 10:14 PM
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Light work
I’m the newest trend, watch me display this action When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion You are a walking meme, and get irked about mentions ‘The Mac will spit’ alright, that’s the word around Craigslist Thousands follow Top iLL, you’re a fruitcake bitch You told us you had 4K Friends, but forgot to mention it’s on a Blu-Ray disc Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election Awkward at bars, so no girl wants to give you their info If you ever end up in their room it will sound like Stone Cold’s intro I read your last battle, for real you’re the fuckin worst I know I told you to pull no punches, but you Shoulda pulled at least 5 from that verse Next
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10-11-2020, 04:52 PM
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TOP iLL.. aka ZUCH!
what's up faggot, folks know you're behind this joke the only diff is that both overdosed on different kind of coke ^ this dude is 80% flour.. 20% sugar, 100% real no fake i got his blood boiling so long he shit a red velvet cake yo body doesn't catch a break cuz that mouth's a trap so much elevation ur stretch marks resemble a topographic map mayb a treasure map? and the fortune is dragster two fact is like any treasure they'll need gps & a shovel to find you besides alias he's a biter too, dude shud rot in shame you're an impostor among us & i'm not talkin bout the game people wont remember ur name & don't care if ur present IDK why u stay in the closet if ur whole family's are trans parents |
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10-12-2020, 02:28 AM
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Craigslist was cool rhyme was kinda a stretch but I’ll overlook
Friends 4K was cool Purple state was dope Closer was cool Mac had some decent ideas but seemed rushed Red velvet cake was one of those Treasure line was good, and also connected well Everything else fell flat to me, had some good ideas that lacked execution, you’ve showed you’re elevating but here you seemed rushed and the verse suffered because of that V/Top Illy |
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10-12-2020, 11:09 AM
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When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion Thousands follow Top iLL, you’re a fruitcake bitch You told us you had 4K Friends, but forgot to mention it’s on a Blu-Ray disc Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election I read your last battle, for real you’re the fuckin worst I know I told you to pull no punches, but you Shoulda pulled at least 5 from that verse Vs. besides alias he's a biter too, dude shud rot in shame you're an impostor among us & i'm not talkin bout the game V/ill
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10-12-2020, 03:42 PM
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4k friends was good Purple state was good too but didn't have the same delivery Stone Cold line had potential but nah Pull no punches was ok/better w. better execution Mac Imposter among us was coo Trans parents had potential Top gmv
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10-12-2020, 05:15 PM
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Top ill
4K friends dope Purple state kinda cool Pull no punches cool Mac Treasure map This one Is clear to me. Mac didn’t have much and some lines like red velvet cake were awful. Mac, I love you brother but this wasn’t your day. Seen you come much harder in pics Vote - Top ill |
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10-13-2020, 08:39 AM
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I’m the newest trend, watch me display this action When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion - good start. You are a walking meme, and get irked about mentions ‘The Mac will spit’ alright, that’s the word around Craigslist - haha childish but made me chuckle. Thousands follow Top iLL, you’re a fruitcake bitch You told us you had 4K Friends, but forgot to mention it’s on a Blu-Ray disc - lol Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election - Nice but I wouldn't have used "swing" twice maybe? Awkward at bars, so no girl wants to give you their info If you ever end up in their room it will sound like Stone Cold’s intro - hahahaha I read your last battle, for real you’re the fuckin worst I know I told you to pull no punches, but you Shoulda pulled at least 5 from that verse - Great closer. Mac: TOP iLL.. aka ZUCH! - News to me^^ what's up faggot, folks know you're behind this joke the only diff is that both overdosed on different kind of coke - I think this one went over my head..? ^ this dude is 80% flour.. 20% sugar, 100% real no fake i got his blood boiling so long he shit a red velvet cake - I mean, okay... Why velvet though? yo body doesn't catch a break cuz that mouth's a trap so much elevation ur stretch marks resemble a topographic map - This didn't make sense with the set-up line but I liked it. mayb a treasure map? and the fortune is dragster two fact is like any treasure they'll need gps & a shovel to find you - Not bad. besides alias he's a biter too, dude shud rot in shame you're an impostor among us & i'm not talkin bout the game - No. people wont remember ur name & don't care if ur present IDK why u stay in the closet if ur whole family's are trans parents - trans-parents is old and flow here was jagged. I got TOP iLL taking this one easy. Mac, thanks for your insights last week on my verse but just wasn't feeling this one from you. Vote - TOP iLL (Zuch)
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10-13-2020, 02:41 PM
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Someone needs to explain to me how mention rhymes with Craigslist. Other than that minor oddity, I thought iLL's verse was solid. Several well thought out and well delivered concepts (hottest garb, pulling punches, purple state) and good, direct wording throughout. Solid verse.
I couldn't get into Mac's verse much. The direct/short setups and punches was cool from a flow perspective, but the concepts didn't strike me as being very clever, and definitely weren't as good as iLL's. But, there's potential there. iLL wins.
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10-14-2020, 10:38 PM
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Top got him here but Mac that opener could have been so fire. Your concepts are dope man you just need to work on that wording
Too had some funny shit. Garb was classic. Mac will spit was funny if a bit low hanging. Wording is always impeccable tho, which is why Zuch I mean top ill remains a problem. Mac, send me your bars, goddammit V/top ill
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10-14-2020, 11:21 PM
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I’m the newest trend, watch me display this action When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion You are a walking meme, and get irked about mentions ‘The Mac will spit’ alright, that’s the word around Craigslist Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election Awkward at bars, so no girl wants to give you their info If you ever end up in their room it will sound like Stone Cold’s intro Closer and friends were also solid but like, i dont wanna quote a whole verse that seems lame. Mac: what's up faggot, folks know you're behind this joke the only diff is that both overdosed on different kind of coke ^ this dude is 80% flour.. 20% sugar, 100% real no fake i got his blood boiling so long he shit a red velvet cake Among us line was cool, everyone should play that game btw. Mac, you're still my hero. V - Top Ill
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4K friends was hilarious
I was gonna do purple state, nice Pull no punches is nice too Among us was cool Trans parents is a concept but I think it needed a lil more work Cool showing from both but top had a couple haymakers that swung it. Ignoring the bar that didn’t rhyme. Vote - top
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10-15-2020, 06:14 PM
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When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion nice concept, dig it You are a walking meme, and get irked about mentions ‘The Mac will spit’ alright, that’s the word around Craigslist lol funny nameplay & site reference but the multi is ass cheeks Thousands follow Top iLL, you’re a fruitcake bitch You told us you had 4K Friends, but forgot to mention it’s on a Blu-Ray disc lol funny, delivery made this pop Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election i've seen to many 'red state' and 'blue state' political bars before to truly love this conceptually...but cool flip Awkward at bars, so no girl wants to give you their info If you ever end up in their room it will sound like Stone Cold’s intro lmao love the wit, this is creatvie and dope I read your last battle, for real you’re the fuckin worst I know I told you to pull no punches, but you Shoulda pulled at least 5 from that verse nice , like the concept...worked well for a closer vs. what's up faggot, folks know you're behind this joke the only diff is that both overdosed on different kind of coke haha, this is jokes to me ^ this dude is 80% flour.. 20% sugar, 100% real no fake i got his blood boiling so long he shit a red velvet cake nah, not feeling yo body doesn't catch a break cuz that mouth's a trap so much elevation ur stretch marks resemble a topographic map elevation and the stretch marks tie in came off weird to me.. this is ok mayb a treasure map? and the fortune is dragster two fact is like any treasure they'll need gps & a shovel to find you eh besides alias he's a biter too, dude shud rot in shame you're an impostor among us & i'm not talkin bout the game cool modern idea .. dig it as is but i feel like this couldve been real dope with more to it people wont remember ur name & don't care if ur present IDK why u stay in the closet if ur whole family's are trans parents solid but again i feel with a tweeking this couldve been better Props to both Top ILL got it. |
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Top went offfff stone cold was hard
Topographic map and red cake was fire Top had too much tho V top ill
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When people say your verse is the hottest garb, they ain’t talking bout the latest fashion garb works, but it's predictable You are a walking meme, and get irked about mentions ‘The Mac will spit’ alright, that’s the word around Craigslist Adverse was the meme. Funny but light Thousands follow Top iLL, you’re a fruitcake bitch You told us you had 4K Friends, but forgot to mention it’s on a Blu-Ray disc lol ok Pull up, this right hand has a burning confession One swing will have your face in such a purple state it could swing the election 'such a purple state' is obvious especially after reading vulgar flip red state like this two weeks ago. Near bite at worst, done recently so it's predictable at best Awkward at bars, so no girl wants to give you their info If you ever end up in their room it will sound like Stone Cold’s intro lol. Light but funny I read your last battle, for real you’re the fuckin worst I know I told you to pull no punches, but you Shoulda pulled at least 5 from that verse ok up faggot, folks know you're behind this joke the only diff is that both overdosed on different kind of coke concept is dope, execution is okay but not the best ^ this dude is 80% flour.. 20% sugar, 100% real no fake i got his blood boiling so long he shit a red velvet cake goofy but nothing crazy yo body doesn't catch a break cuz that mouth's a trap so much elevation ur stretch marks resemble a topographic map funny, but especially when you acknowledge that it's zuch already its not too personal mayb a treasure map? and the fortune is dragster two fact is like any treasure they'll need gps & a shovel to find you I get the punch but the setup lost me. He's a fortune? Is it that his body looks like a treasure map? besides alias he's a biter too, dude shud rot in shame you're an impostor among us & i'm not talkin bout the game cool flip, relevant, but biter - > imposter isn't cohesive enough. Something like his image as being dope is misleading, anything to get is from point a to point b, cause as it is, it's a little jarring people wont remember ur name & don't care if ur present IDK why u stay in the closet if ur whole family's are trans parents I do not get it. In the closet is meant to be a double entendre for closeted gay but also hiding? This one lost me tbh Mac had funny ideas but fell off. Top was okay, but more consistent Hope that state flip wasn't a bite V/top
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