WEEK 1: Sharp vs Corleone SHARP WINS

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[Sharp]

No recycling old shit per league rules

[Sharp]

You showing @Corleone ?

Here's my verse unless he shows

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Obv ext if you need it

[corleone]

Originally Posted by Sharp

No recycling old shit per league rules

since when you ever see me recycle any old shit? lol.. my verse will be in by tonight, if not, i'll take the ext..

[corleone]

quick keystyle..

they say the 3rd time is a charm.. what is it? our 3rd battle to date?,
no homo.. so you could wipe that sad look off of your face// (.. lol fag)
jealousy is a bitch trait.. that you've proven at heart,
for christ sake, how much more shit could you possibly talk?// (.. lol hes obsessed with me)
let's be real.. your obsession with me has gone it's course,
I'd ask you politely to stop, but I knew you wouldn't confide in divorce// ( .. lol you a bitch stan)
pussy nigga.. keep my name out of your mouth,
and since' you struggling with that, I could help you out..
let us begin.. first, pick up a blade and gently slice your wrists,
secondly.. make sure you cut deep enough to sense//
last of all.. if you cut for all your blood to rinse,
you should end up on the floor, and feel off a bit// (.. lol)
learn anything new?.. let's back track, to where we first began in our fued//
we planned to battle.. I outmatched you, but yet, had to mangle your crew//
had it not been for swaying votes, between yourself, zuchie, and blu..
explain how would you win any battle, outside your complexion with dudes?//

[Sharp]

Been a whiny bitch since ‘96. Still got the same style bro
Id call you a cancer of text, but that would imply some growth
No one’s quoted him in 30 years. Every verse is only dookie
If anyone gave Coraline, they’d need to be as fucked up as a Tim Burton Movie
Hush’s blind tourney proved we don’t need the name to see you’re whack
with THAT verse in Shadowboxing? I’d say RZA dodged a bullet keeping you off his tracks
800+ Twitter follows with 0 likes. Buying followers? You the lamest, wow
Your socials scream ‘biological clock ticking’ - desperate for engagement now
Got no one on social media. Friends disinterest must be tough to swallow
For your people, that twitter’s like your punches. One look and it’s ‘I don’t follow’
Between your verses and shoe line, I don't know what's more of a disaster
Punches don't land... kicks will never make it... fuck, you really are the shadowboxing master

I gave you 12. You're welcome.

[UserName]

Nothing


Vs.

Been a whiny bitch since ‘96. Still got the same style bro
Id call you a cancer of text, but that would imply some growth
No one’s quoted him in 30 years. Every verse is only dookie
If anyone gave Coraline, they’d need to be as fucked up as a Tim Burton Movie
Hush’s blind tourney proved we don’t need the name to see you’re whack
with THAT verse in Shadowboxing? I’d say RZA dodged a bullet keeping you off his tracks

The only thing Cor had was multi’s and a semi pleasant rhyme structure but everything he said was so dated it was completely uninteresting. Sharp had the wittier concepts, the harder disses, and just shut Cor down at every angle.

V - Sharp

[Hush]

Sharp won in the first line


Corleone didn’t have any punchlines he just kind of told a bland story in a boring way


Vote sharp

[Universe]

Corleone:

they say the 3rd time is a charm.. what is it? our 3rd battle to date?,
no homo.. so you could wipe that sad look off of your face// (.. lol fag)

- battle-to-date... decent opener

jealousy is a bitch trait.. that you've proven at heart,
for christ sake, how much more shit could you possibly talk?// (.. lol hes obsessed with me)

- nah

let's be real.. your obsession with me has gone it's course,
I'd ask you politely to stop, but I knew you wouldn't confide in divorce// ( .. lol you a bitch stan)

- I think "confide" isn't the right word here. You just rhyming "gone" with "fied", which works, but the word needs to be relevant.

pussy nigga.. keep my name out of your mouth,
and since' you struggling with that, I could help you out..

- you and I have the same problem with making rhyme schemes in a battle verse lol

let us begin.. first, pick up a blade and gently slice your wrists,
secondly.. make sure you cut deep enough to sense//

- I mean, cool... but doesnt hit that heavy.

last of all.. if you cut for all your blood to rinse,
you should end up on the floor, and feel off a bit// (.. lol)

- focus more on punchlines rather than multi's... I'm finding out they arent rewarded here

learn anything new?.. let's back track, to where we first began in our fued//
we planned to battle.. I outmatched you, but yet, had to mangle your crew//

- just an opinion, no punch.

had it not been for swaying votes, between yourself, zuchie, and blu..
explain how would you win any battle, outside your complexion with dudes?//

- complexion of dudes? I don't see that being relevant. But I get your statement here.


Sharp:

Been a whiny bitch since ‘96. Still got the same style bro
Id call you a cancer of text, but that would imply some growth

- Truth.

No one’s quoted him in 30 years. Every verse is only dookie
If anyone gave Coraline, they’d need to be as fucked up as a Tim Burton Movie

- I fuck with Coraline lol. Cool little flip.

Hush’s blind tourney proved we don’t need the name to see you’re whack
with THAT verse in Shadowboxing? I’d say RZA dodged a bullet keeping you off his tracks

- haha.

800+ Twitter follows with 0 likes. Buying followers? You the lamest, wow
Your socials scream ‘biological clock ticking’ - desperate for engagement now

- Sharp has BOOKS of personals on Cor by now lol.

Got no one on social media. Friends disinterest must be tough to swallow
For your people, that twitter’s like your punches. One look and it’s ‘I don’t follow’

- lol loved this.

Between your verses and shoe line, I don't know what's more of a disaster
Punches don't land... kicks will never make it... fuck, you really are the shadowboxing master

- Perfect closer.

Sharp took this on entertainment value alone. Really enjoyed his verse.

Cor, you can rhyme man. Focus more on punchlines and not schemes/multi's. I have to do the same.

Vote - Sharp

[Mac]

nothing

vs.

Been a whiny bitch since ‘96. Still got the same style bro
Id call you a cancer of text, but that would imply some growth
No one’s quoted him in 30 years. Every verse is only dookie
If anyone gave Coraline, they’d need to be as fucked up as a Tim Burton Movie
Hush’s blind tourney proved we don’t need the name to see you’re whack
with THAT verse in Shadowboxing? I’d say RZA dodged a bullet keeping you off his tracks
800+ Twitter follows with 0 likes. Buying followers? You the lamest, wow
Your socials scream ‘biological clock ticking’ - desperate for engagement now
Got no one on social media. Friends disinterest must be tough to swallow
For your people, that twitter’s like your punches. One look and it’s ‘I don’t follow’
Between your verses and shoe line, I don't know what's more of a disaster
Punches don't land... kicks will never make it... fuck, you really are the shadowboxing master

no hate corleone but I didn't enjoy your verse at all.. no punchlines or whatsoever, sharp killed it with personals and cool wordplays, whole verse was cool and gave me chuckless

v/sharp

[Bomb Bard]

One sided battle here. Corleone has nothing but generic shit. Don’t need to break it down.

Cancer was savage and shadow boxing was dope


V/sharp

[Blue Bayou]

some solid wording but very ancient concepts

vs.

Been a whiny bitch since ‘96. Still got the same style bro
Id call you a cancer of text, but that would imply some growth
No one’s quoted him in 30 years. Every verse is only dookie
If anyone gave Coraline, they’d need to be as fucked up as a Tim Burton Movie
Hush’s blind tourney proved we don’t need the name to see you’re whack
with THAT verse in Shadowboxing? I’d say RZA dodged a bullet keeping you off his tracks
800+ Twitter follows with 0 likes. Buying followers? You the lamest, wow
Your socials scream ‘biological clock ticking’ - desperate for engagement now
Got no one on social media. Friends disinterest must be tough to swallow
For your people, that twitter’s like your punches. One look and it’s ‘I don’t follow’



Sharp bodied

[Adverse]

This isn’t really close.

Sharp didn’t really miss. Even his okay stuff was leagues beyond anything Cor put out here

No personals no punchlines nothing clever on Corleones part, I can understand your style being stuck in the past, but there’s no way you’re stuck in a place without personals or name plays or anything of the like.

Sharp hit this one out of the park, overkill from opener to close just super consistent and tough

V/Sharp

[Destroyer]

Vote Sharp
Corleone is trash
Sharp had like three or four killers in there
Cancer was perfect

V/remove corleone from the site like the cancer he is

[evaD]

Vote - corleone

Sharp bit all those bars I can provide links

[TOP iLL DRAGSTER TWO]

Vote - sharp

Cancer line is LOTW

whole verse was dope

Corleone had nothing that I liked