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Old 01-28-2013, 12:36 AM   #1
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im bout to take the image of a villain wit hatred in em
who cant contain the viciousness of my aimless vision
its cloudy overhead and about to be raining diction
in methodical exchanges between my brain and digits
which ends up a dangerous explanation in a range of
writtens..
this could get insane in minutes as i engage my business
so these fakes can witness a great, with crazy swiftness
i just want to exchange my gifts, take the cake im given
wasted off jays of piff, take me to the stage, im chillen
im all in my phase, invader zin on that space invader shit
now its an invasion of these lames thats into anus tasting
friends..
i hope the gates of heaven bend cuz satan wont let em in
im in the basement on that cellar tip, elevating my lettering
patience is irrelevant, creating greatness is the evidence
be amazed with my elements or encased in aggressiveness
face lifts and necklace slits that'll spray sick with elegance
placement..
texting bomb threats to iraqi vets, a sect of saddams kin
...disrespect in vivid threads, matching stitch off Tron fits
check my drop in, its fresh as the black and red lebron Xs
i wanna be where accidents happening is prominent actions
i call it the projects..
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Old 01-28-2013, 12:41 AM   #2
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Multis were perfectly unforced at the start but content was lacking. I know u got it in u. Keep keyin
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Old 01-28-2013, 03:35 PM   #3
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This was a good read. There was some uneven points concerning subject matter, but you were just "brainstorming", so I get it, lol. You have many good ideas, but should stick with a concept expand on it and then move onto the next one with more fluidity, imo. Nice drop overall, Camp.

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i hope the gates of heaven bend cuz satan wont let em in
im in the basement on that cellar tip, elevating my lettering
patience is irrelevant, creating greatness is the evidence
be amazed with my elements or encased in aggressiveness
face lifts and necklace slits that'll spray sick with elegance
placement..
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Old 01-28-2013, 08:27 PM   #4
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First off the multis were on point for the most part. The second half could have been better. This seemed like a flex verse. Flex felt but like split said the content was lacking or better yet half said. I enjoyed the read tho.
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Old 01-29-2013, 05:19 PM   #5
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To all of those that said this was lacking content:
im bout to take the image of a villain wit hatred in em
who cant contain the viciousness of my aimless vision

I honestly thought this was definatly a dope concept of just brainstorming and the flow of this was good as hell man. I kinda wish I would have thought of this idea first now lol. But definatly a good job broheim.
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this was strait son the flow was nuts just flowed off the tongue like water. this part was slick as fuck
"its cloudy overhead and about to be raining diction
in methodical exchanges between my brain and digits
which ends up a dangerous explanation in a range of
writtens.."
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Old 01-30-2013, 06:57 PM   #7
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Very smooth, easy to read. Didn't really like the 2nd set of bars just cause the subject matter seemed a bit basic/generic but other than that pretty solid.
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thanks for all the feed/views fams.....got another craaazy drop coming up later tonight...!!
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