Freewrite 2

[Wutzit Tewya]

They soapin' our brain matter. wash 'n drainin' what matters..replace it with cake batter and mix it. We gotta fix it. But instead we rollin with it. We stay in the same patterns. Substitutin being human with technological interactions. Media holds the paintbrush..our naive minds are open canvases...take a look at the news. Murders and amberlampses. Racial wars and political injustices abundant. Positivity plummeted. This shits getting redundant. But we just sit in front of it, gossiping while we munchin. But I'm just tired of it and gettin' sick to my stomach.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

The subject-matter wasn't well defined. It's sociopolitical, but kind of all over the place. Then again, I guess that hences at the definition of a freewrite, right? In any case, I appreciate that the scheme was different from the norm. It was kind of slanty, but still rhythmic. It works. Pretty fluent I suppose. Lyrically you were on point. Definitely enough to hold my attention for the entirety of the read. Which is always a +1 in my book. I like your style. However, I personally would be very interested in seeing what you can do with a full fledged topical or story based concept. Just out of curiosity. You got some skills, bro. Keel expouding and most importantly, keep posting. Peace.

[Current faggot]

Nothing stands out. The flow is good. The subject matter lacks consistency. No lines that wow me. But the flow made it worth the read. Keep droping