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Old 04-13-2018, 11:54 AM   #1
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SUNRISE MEDITATION

{Continuation...}

In this day and age it's all confusion.
They set the stage then they play the music
and turn the play into a grand illusion.
'Amazing Grace' is what they sang to Judas
as strange fruit dangled from the noose!
Tell the truth, I don't blame Brutus
cos blood stains on his blade laid the blueprint
to modern day revolution!

THEN AGAIN ... that's just my 2¢.

A penny for your thoughts
is what they promise.
An educated fool
I thank college.
They trained me like a stooge
to pay homage.
Cos keeping us robotic
is exactly how they $prophet$.

Man, I swear to DOG they really got us!

And I feel like Harry Potter...
cos our schools are like a tomb
if you really know the knowledge.
What you're talking is the problem.
We're imprisoned by linguistics
pay attention it's subconscious.

When they teach us how to spell
using cursive for the cursing
raising demons out of Hell.
Cos the Gospel's just a God-spell
and the churches know this well.
Turning words into terms...
that'll sentence us to jail.
First they'll book you
then they'll crook you.
You ain't getting out so bail.

Let me tale you what to do.
Be mindfull what you say
in the mo(u)rning when you wake.
Don't condem me to Hel-low
where the Helios is gray
or go 'n sacrifice your soul
in the evening when you pray/prey.
Cos when they *bless you
they'll substract you in a supernatural way.
Using language makes us languid
if we never learn the game.
Cos their Alpha Bet is rigged
and we're all gonna pay

Be Safe!



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Old 04-17-2018, 01:17 AM   #2
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The first thing I always notice about your drops is the fucking structure. The structure and the rhyme scheme. Very intelligent and professional. You also have always had this ability to send such a strong message without being over dramatic with your wording. I always have admired that. You keep the flow so solid while sending your message with authority. I love that. I liked the ending line in your first verse about "prophet". You killed it with the yellow wording I enjoyed that a lot. For real SELF you just keep upping your game every time you drop.
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Old 04-17-2018, 08:35 AM   #3
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I hate the structure...this whole centerin' shit is ehh, but whatev's do you...slick piece bro...You seem intellectual as fuck, had some nice imagery & emotion here while holdin' shit down with a pretty consistent flow...

Liked it, stay good hombre.
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Old 04-25-2018, 02:03 PM   #4
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nasty.

one of my personal fav from u.
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