Midnight Prophecy

[ACTIVATE SELF]

-Midnight Prophecy-

"The end is almost near
& I'm not sure how I know this
I just feel it in my bones
& in my sleep I see explosions
My middle name is Logan
& that's close enough to Moses
Plus, my cousin's name is Noah
So in a way I'm "chosen"(?)".

"Oh, religious hocus-pocus ..."

"No, Joseph, I'm not joking
I'm just tryna think and focus
& make sense of this psychosis
That's inside my broken head."

"Bro ...
Even though you're loco
Let's take it from the top
Every night you go to bed...."

"And have this reocurring dream
Where I'm hiking up a mountain
Near the mouth of a ravine
It's a picture perfect scene
Birds are chirping in the trees
Perched high above the creek
While the turf beneath my feet
Is a skirt of fireweed
And purple Bee Orchids
All surrounded by a green
Breathtaking stretch
Of a never-ending forest
That produces fresh air
Like the sourthern tip of Portland
With a subtle hint of orange
And a pine-needle smell
That I taste on my tongue
Every time I inhale
As I hike up the trail
The Sun sinks and melts
Right beneath the blue sky
Making room for the Moon
That'll bloom in due time
Just as soon as the hue
Of the overcast fades
And the firmament is ready
For the lunar escapade

I continue on my way
'til I reach a plateau
& what I see down below
Is a glowing spectacle
A city full of light
That illuminates at night
As the traffic shines bright
On the highway that lines
The entire downtown
Which is roughly several miles
From my current locale
And this circumstance allows
A perfect point of view
Cause the purposeful & proud
Ubanized corral
In the middle of the valley
Is about to go KAPOW
As an earthbound missile
Hits the center of the ground!!!

I am totally astounded
(In a horrified sense)
It goes soundless for a smidgen
Than an orange storm emits
An enormous fire pit
From the depths of the metro
That's so forcefully intense
That it forms a swarm of winds
Full of thermal radiation
That destroys the whole grid
In a vaporized fashion
Leaving skyscrapers stripped
To their bare min·i·mums
And men burnt to crisps
Without a single living one
To tell of the events
Caused by Kim Jong-un
And his North Korean bomb
That will propagate a war
& cause a nuclear response."

"Well, Gotdamn, Scottie
I'm happy it's a dream
& you're not really Nostradamus."

*Turns to news channel 4*

"Emergency Alert:
Donald Trump declares war."

...Topical battle verse written to the picture...

[Elemental P]

*reserved* I got this later homie good shit

[Lyriscologist]

I havent read a topical piece in Yeeeears but this was really well done.. your descriptive content paints the picture clearly, almost flawless in every aspect.. personally would like to see more complex rhymes and schemes but is really unnecessary for this kind of piece.. solid overall bro, well done!

last 8 lines of the first section was my favorite part

[ACTIVATE SELF]

Appreciate that, bro. I'm actually going to take your feed into consideration, because I've been getting that scheme comment quite a bit lately. Personally, I think the scheme is pretty complex, given the sheer amount of words, assonance, inners, vowel and constant sounds that actually rhyme. I think it just looks less obvious to the eye because the end rhymes aren't always compounded or line up in a predictable manner. However, if you read the verse under breath or aloud, you can more easily identify the technique. Not to say you didn't by any means. But, yeah, I'll definitely take what you said and apply it to a future piece. Thanks for the read, feed and insight . Give me some time and the favor will be returned.

[Lyriscologist]

no doubt

[Elemental P]

My fav part was the verse you started with "reoccurring dream" that whole verses imagery almost literally painted a picture, best use for topical battles. Solid flow and cadence for most part but felt a few lines could have used extra syllables. Used a relevant topic which I liked thru the eyes of a prophet. Well written man.

[dead man]

i really liked the rhythm you gave this. it was fast paced and never lost a beat.

your description of the mountain pass was also excellent. the pine trees and soft earth. i felt it. the portland comparison really brought it home as well, i could see myself floating their river again. very cool.

i don't know if i am older and tired or what, but it takes a lot for me to throw myself into a "topical" verse like this one most days. it just reads like too much like a linear bit of fairytale and at this exact moment it doesn't excite me. i scanned the forum for a verse from your personal river. some kind of internal release - a mind activation if you will.

your writing is very technically sound - it's your subject matter most times that i have trouble slugging through based on the 3rd person topicality of it. many are fans, and excellent at it, but i'm not one of them either capacity right at the time.

this was amusing and well written. like many of your submissions. i am a fan of your execution and creativity.

thank you