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Old 05-24-2018, 02:41 PM   #1
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The American audience comes to expect
graphic depictions of death
as long as the victim is part of a system
that they have come to reject.
Then conform their identity,
pundits and pageantry,
rally behind all the partisan lies—
Use constant conjecture to lay out and measure
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We show footage of tragedy
mindlessly counting the money we make
then sermonize happily behind a camera
right before taking a commercial break
Companies dictate the words that we say
writing the script from behind the scenes
laughing at people who really believe
this is only a problem since 2016.
Build ads into stories
next to the thoughts and prayers that we offer
selling you products during our broadcast.
Here’s another word from our sponsors.
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Old 05-24-2018, 09:32 PM   #2
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Really digging this yo, flow was decent with good content and vocabulary. Looking forward to reading more from you
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Old 05-24-2018, 09:40 PM   #3
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The American audience comes to expect
graphic depictions of death
as long as the victim is part of a system
that they have come to reject.
Then conform their identity,
pundits and pageantry,
rally behind all the partisan lies—
Use constant conjecture to lay out and measure
the reason their “enemy” deserved to die.

^^Nice...

Good shit fam, liked it all just thought the first half was tight as fuck...

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You ever watch that movie Christine?

not the 80s film..

in some sort of twisted world such as mine I see that as this
I see a frustration that burns deep within that needs an outlet
the idea & wording stick to the concept throughout the whole piece

I cant really pick out my favorite line but it picked up halfway through
dope shit man.
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the rhymes and flow of this were pretty good.

looked like the second half was a critique of commercialism but I'm not quite sure what the first half was saying.
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