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Old 08-23-2013, 08:19 PM   #1
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The Undead Won't Survive Tooth
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With years of practice we accepted
that zombies live among us
While factions utilized them as
weapons with a strange & serious
hunger
I studied the beast closely for an
array of military conquers
Watching them eat grosses me,
chewing
openly with nefarious chompers
Horrid bites of flesh swallowed after
multiple chews
Prowling all night, no rest, sore
wounds & collagen oozed
No fatigues, we deploy the sad souls
to roam the streets
Marching the slowest speed equipped
with invincible bodies and atrocious
teeth
War raged on, munitions rockets
rained down a brazen storm
The walking dead played along until
tooth decay came raging strong
Our team, though not breathing, had
human characteristics
Wit molars dislodged from their
dentures, it left us wit an
embarrassing predicament
I reported the facts; my
documentation was vivid yet rigorous
Our crew of fighting cadavers needs
an oral hygiene dentist fix
Daily floss and mouth wash on top of
complimentary brushing
The bacterial consumed fucked us,
sorry, vulgarity thrusting
The U.N asked volunteers and local
missionary groups
To lend an ear about administering
an incendiary goop
As the contraption tested on the
rotted corpse chewers
Counteracting fungus as displayed to
the infomercial viewers
Labeled T.U.W.S.T.D respectfully on
cleansing tubes
Helps them shred through the meat
traitorously and rinse endless food
The owner of "revive a body for pets"
bought in bulk
The ones who was once chalked can
now inhale proudly in large gulps
Major corporate sponsors ran plenty
commercial promotions
The gel lubricate the fiends bicuspid
helping with the dispersal of erosion
Many felt appalled to contribute to
the proceeds of war
We watched in awe as shadow figures
racked in millions with ghostly paws
Foolish helpers lost limbs attempting
treatment
As numerous health officials cringed
at the grotesque proceedings
Are we to believe exfoliating these
things prove vital?
As we rub Colgate between their
cheeks in lurid cycles
With all the foundations to sponsor....
the mess was chosen?
civilians urged the abomination
abolished and invest in soldiers
Should we consider rights for the
carnivorous breed?
Ignoring pedestrian life, parachuting
them abroad for a tourist feed
The politicians held a press
conference promising to have a heart
To address concerns and comments
and hear our remarks
It was amazing, Before the first word
was uttered
A vagrant launched an attack,
plagued with bite marks and
sunburns
I sat front row, shocked, the crowd
worked in a frenzy
Congress reaped the benefits of their
program...
& All I could do is admire the ghouls
dentistry/






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Old 08-23-2013, 08:47 PM   #2
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