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LGPA Season 2: Week I
@Adonis @Mr. J Check ins: MondayMidnight Eastern time) Poems Due: Wednesday (Midnight Eastern time) Votes due: Sunday (Midnight Eastern time) Topic: ![]() Goodluck Last edited by Inno; 12-10-2015 at 07:55 PM. |
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Heavy eyelids, drifting away.
Darkness hiding in shadows She sits unafraid She's brave in that sense Still a youth, fearful of shame maturing in age, knowledge is growth And a dry bed is the goal ... Finally if you post I want an extension to match
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Soaring through the sky
the majestic eagle. scooping up prey rather than trying to rescue people for one moment she became savage.. 1, 2, 3.. her opponent is in a weak place. her favorite film...Nacho Libre
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Mr.J: Interesting approach, straight forward as far as language goes with some young wonder and fantasy in between the words. Pretty cool overall and I can definitely see the connection to Nacho Libre, haha. Cool shit.
Adonis: Pretty cool take on a young kids mental stability and their thoughts. Lots of understanding how a childs brain works. Not sure if the last sentence brings forth the issue of wetting the bed which a lot of kids struggle with, but I choose to understand it as such and I find the challenge and fear she's facing this night to be a tough one. Vote - one a bit more abstract than the other. It could go either way imho but Adonis edges it on this one for acknowledging the hardships of the youth and I liked his approach slightly better although the wittiness and smile at the end of Mr.J's did an impact too.
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Adonis - Sort of funny. Simplistic. Awkwardly charming - like the picture. Hmm. Not bad submission but underwhelming performance for your first warm-up of the season.
Mr. Jenkins - Wasn't feeling this. It didn't build up to the obvious Nacho Libre punchline IMO. Not really what I was anticipating or hoping for. Welcome to the league anyways. I understand why you wrote something of this length because your opponent set the bar low. Vote - Adonis |
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I could done with out the nacho libre. But it it does fit
You direction so i cant fault you to much for that. Though You could of used a better reference and still kept your direction. Pretty cool imagery tho. Adonis Wasnt feeling this at all. Didnt say anything. It stalled as far as a story goes But ready it again i sense what you where going for. You should of kept this Going. Vote J |
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Adonis wins
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