nothin serious.

Geno · 08-10-2015, 04:36 PM

Sword brawler, i brawl sharp, your point duller
Thinkin bout beef with the god, you boy wonder
Underground king, sling baterangs with bruce
Bootlegging a duece-duece, hundred proof, the truth
al capone in these tunnels, lock, load, then shoot
Precision tuned, blow a mans earlobes to the moon
Totally gooned out, and when i fire this lazer..
It puts a whole through your dome, size of the equator
Sign up for this labor, get the work you deserve
Naturally flying off the handle, hard work for the birds
ive got a purpose to serve, red bone demons with curves
Let'er write on my dick, and watch'er eat her own words

Nigma · 08-11-2015, 01:10 AM

Good shit Gen. Technically sound, transitions stood out, liked the references and plays, last bar was also standout. Only line I wasn't feeling was the equator line. You build imagery up towards a round hole in someones head and comparing it to the equator was a miss haha. Otherwise cool read

08-10-2015, 04:36 PM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	nothin serious. Sword brawler, i brawl sharp, your point duller Thinkin bout beef with the god, you boy wonder Underground king, sling baterangs with bruce Bootlegging a duece-duece, hundred proof, the truth al capone in these tunnels, lock, load, then shoot Precision tuned, blow a mans earlobes to the moon Totally gooned out, and when i fire this lazer.. It puts a whole through your dome, size of the equator Sign up for this labor, get the work you deserve Naturally flying off the handle, hard work for the birds ive got a purpose to serve, red bone demons with curves Let'er write on my dick, and watch'er eat her own words __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-11-2015, 01:10 AM	#2
Nigma The COAT... Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: BC, Canada Posts: 1,723 Battle Record: 28-20 Champed - Art of Writing League (x3) Rep Power: 4595813	Good shit Gen. Technically sound, transitions stood out, liked the references and plays, last bar was also standout. Only line I wasn't feeling was the equator line. You build imagery up towards a round hole in someones head and comparing it to the equator was a miss haha. Otherwise cool read __________________