Wanderer 3-4 Vs Chyeah Guevara 0-2 - WANDERER WINS

[Allen Knight]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, June 18th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!

@Wanderer @Chyyeah Guevara @Alpo the Alpha

[Wanderer]

Check

[Chyeahhh!!!]

I'm not sure I'm getting half his shit at times – Wanderer..in reference to me vs Ill Nika

Gotta admit I was offended, obviously my lines went over your head
Then I saw your pic, and you literally have lines going over your head
Old age came for you a tad bit early , it’s a wrap and it’s over
This muthafucka goes to the barbershop…… and asks for the Homer
I’m dying my nigga, to type this, was almost too weak to do it
I’d take your wig off, but your hair follicles beat me to it
This bald fucker never gets the hints, and still asks chicks to date
Bitches be like, “no thank’s Wanderer, but that’s awful nice of you..toupe”
Nice record Mr. No show, now I’ll serve this peon right
This here’s the end of Wand, cause I’mma put you in the ER twice
cruised right into this beatin’ like you typed me into your Tom Tom
So kiss the ring, or get back handed back to your corner, cuz I’m the Don, Wan
you’re losing by a hair , coming in dead last
When I retire, they’ll hang my jersey, when you retire, they’ll hang Lebron’s head band
This lesson was brief, stepping to me is just accepting defeat
I beat a dead horse this whole verse, you’ll beat a horse to death for it’s weave

[Wanderer]

Really? Pretty much a whole verse on my hair

Dudes bad with words. Don't put money on that type of shit
only time we'd place an Alphabet is on the improbability of him reciting it
Obvs you were an accidental birth who grew up spoutin' crap
all ya wack writtens pass straight Bias & even your own mother ain't vote outta that
Closet faggot. Cuddling up with your boyfriend after another date
way you half naked with that fruit on ya chest would be enough to make Jilti look straight
Broke & useless. unemployment means you ain't building up stacks
I'll hack you to pieces. Trust it won't be another job lost when I Give you the Axe
Seriously homie when've you ever bankrolled tons?
don't know if you've got the time to speaker you're too busy selling stolen ones
Goons hunting you down, good luck. can't even hide you're fucked
but it'll be easy for you to Lylo when you're given enough Air to blow one up
dude loves his girls bed head look tho I bet she's got a nasty snatch
All that Frisbie. & yet it's only std's being thrown around to catch
Type to make me wanna grab the knife. Put you in a hearse, I'll lose it.
no ones gonna save your life & you certainly can't write a verse to do it.

[Tic]

[QUOTE=Alpo the Alpha;492062]I'm not sure I'm getting half his shit at times [I]

[Tic]

Wtf....I just did a bar breakdown and that's all that came up? Well.....

Chyea focused wayy too much on the hair. Kar came with a dope line last week that'd be hard to beat. Maybe 1 punch would've been ok, but you had 5. I also wasn't feeling too many of your lines. The one hair one was pretty nice, but other than that, meh. Wanderer gets this easy for being much more consistent and LOTB with frisbie.

[Amen.]

Alpo

a shame you focused your entire verse on this dudes comb over. I think you could have switched it up a little. Got corny after the 1st 2 bars bro. I mean - the beating a dead horse is a pretty played cliche but you some what flipped it with a some what relevant concept that if it wasn't played, it is now.

Wanderer

Alphabet was ok. Bias was cool and Frisbee was nice. Think you had the better verse here.

Wanderer got it

[Ronin]

Yea too much focus on his hair but u did have a couple good lines.I like toupe and ur closer was lol. Wanderer had some misses too but he had more hits with alphabet, selling stolen speakers was lol, frisbie and the closer was harsh I liked it too.

Vote wandy

[IAmRhetoric]

Alpo
You literally had your whole verse dedicated to a man's hair.. come on man. Not even funny, half of the bars weren't good, and it lost its shine 2 bars in.

Wand
Consistent verse, some good jabs.

v/ Wanderer

[Clutbuck]

I dunno, I liked Alpo's verse more.

A lot of Wanderers shit was just predictable generics to me, like, as I'm reading the line and see the wordplay capitalised at the start - I can already see where the payoffs going, so I've got the punch before he's even finished the line. I used to have the same problem with Bryonds shit, same exact fucking thing, honestly...

I don't think Alpo went too mad on the hair jokes either yo

I liked the toupe ish

thought the ER thing was fresh

lebrons head band was cool

I just felt like a lot of Wanderers material fell flat to me, swings and misses...

I got Alpo

[Kill Spree]

this battle was weak. alpo had toupe..and could have made it way nicer. and all of waners stuff was played tbh. i got alpha edging this by a quotable

v/Alph

[Unfukwitable]

Nothing I felt worthy of quoting..

But one came with a one dimensional approach about dudes bald'ness which had some humor but not hitting the other had some okay'ish lines that didnt sting but one edged it here for me but this wasn't a good read here. v/Wand

[murda sho]

Wanderer

Dudes bad with words. Don't put money on that type of shit
only time we'd place an Alphabet is on the improbability of him reciting it

Closet faggot. Cuddling up with your boyfriend after another date
way you half naked with that fruit on ya chest would be enough to make Jilti look straight

dude loves his girls BED head look tho I bet she's got a nasty snatch
All that Frisbie. & yet it's only std's being thrown around to catch
Type to make me wanna grab the knife. Put you in a hearse, I'll lose it.
no ones gonna save your life & you certainly can't write a verse to do it.


Alpo

Old age came for you a tad bit early , it’s a wrap and it’s over
This muthafucka goes to the barbershop…… and asks for the Homer

Nice record Mr. No show, now I’ll serve this peon right
This here’s the end of Wand, cause I’mma put you in the ER twice

This lesson was brief, STEPPING to me is just accepting defeat
I beat a dead horse this whole verse, you’ll beat a horse to death for it’s weave


This was a clash of styles definitely... Alpo really odd on the hair jokes which was kinda corny to me, he did land two of them though and that Er bar was dope shit... Wanderer had some misses but the ones that hit were cool to me and that save ur life bar was funny i actually laughed... i got him with one more quote so ima go with Wanderer for the edge here

[Destroyer]

chyeahh did a whole verse on his hair which hurt him
toupe was funny tho
er twice was ok

wan had place an alphabet, jilti, frisbee

v/wan

[fraze]

Originally Posted by Alpo the Alpha

Gotta admit I was offended, obviously my lines went over your head
Then I saw your pic, and you literally have lines going over your head
i get where you're going but too simple. and this isn't a hard punch
Old age came for you a tad bit early , it’s a wrap and it’s over
This muthafucka goes to the barbershop…… and asks for the Homer
funny, but a little straightforward. light jab.
I’m dying my nigga, to type this, was almost too weak to do it
I’d take your wig off, but your hair follicles beat me to it
better punch but wording is bad.
This bald fucker never gets the hints, and still asks chicks to date
Bitches be like, “no thank’s Wanderer, but that’s awful nice of you..toupe”
played but still funny.
Nice record Mr. No show, now I’ll serve this peon right
This here’s the end of Wand, cause I’mma put you in the ER twice
no thanks
cruised right into this beatin’ like you typed me into your Tom Tom
So kiss the ring, or get back handed back to your corner, cuz I’m the Don, Wan
didn't set this up well enough to hit
you’re losing by a hair , coming in dead last
When I retire, they’ll hang my jersey, when you retire, they’ll hang Lebron’s head band
ok concept but isn't directed or harsh. sloppy slant rhyme also takes away from the effect
This lesson was brief, stepping to me is just accepting defeat
I beat a dead horse this whole verse, you’ll beat a horse to death for it’s weave
ok.. see what you were doing but i would have switched out a few off the hair lines anyway b/c it gets redundant after a while. the whole verse doesn't need to be the same for this to work, a few references would have been fine with good setup. you hampered your verse to pull off a mediocre punch.

Originally Posted by Wanderer

Dudes bad with words. Don't put money on that type of shit
only time we'd place an Alphabet is on the improbability of him reciting it
okay wp, bad wording in punch
Obvs you were an accidental birth who grew up spoutin' crap
all ya wack writtens pass straight Bias & even your own mother ain't vote outta that
didnt like this
Closet faggot. Cuddling up with your boyfriend after another date
way you half naked with that fruit on ya chest would be enough to make Jilti look straight
nah.
Broke & useless. unemployment means you ain't building up stacks
I'll hack you to pieces. Trust it won't be another job lost when I Give you the Axe
too straightforward.
Seriously homie when've you ever bankrolled tons?
don't know if you've got the time to speaker you're too busy selling stolen ones
little bit wordy but cool punch
Goons hunting you down, good luck. can't even hide you're fucked
but it'll be easy for you to Lylo when you're given enough Air to blow one up
ok concept, light punch
dude loves his girls bed head look tho I bet she's got a nasty snatch
All that Frisbie. & yet it's only std's being thrown around to catch
a little forced, could have been set up better. still ok
Type to make me wanna grab the knife. Put you in a hearse, I'll lose it.
no ones gonna save your life & you certainly can't write a verse to do it.
this was cool.

Alpo had a few cool lines but he over did it with the hair. If you're gonna do a bars about the same thing more than once they have to be dope enough to keep people's attention. Alot of the bars were weak disses, and though a few were funny, that's not enough to win a battle.

With Wanderer, I liked speaker and his closer. Had some missteps, but more from being too simple with concepts, or slight misses on wording. Did enough to pull out a win.

Vote: Wanderer