The Bar Scene.

Geno · 12-25-2014, 12:24 PM

Destructively drunk, slurring, cuss at a bitch
Bartenders favorite customer, that doesnt tip
Pool table, cue balls, stools, cup full of chips
Potential arsenol in case surroundung company trips
Its a tough crowd, but i always love this watering hole
A place where trashy broads in dirty clothes certainly rome
Far cry further from home, than the dump on my block
That nobody goes to cause its smothered with cops
Im a couple of shots deep, a few beers and some dope
So i go in the bathroom, and notice the mirrors are broke
I pay close attention to everything, when i observe
Chick at the bar has a light reflection, next to her purse
Im guessin shit went down, that revolves around her
Guy buying her drinks, knuckles are mauled and obscured
He doesnt think anyone sees, all the blood where hes hurt
Stumbling from the corner, comes the man who was split
Wondering where his wife is, goddamnit, the bitch
She watched him get hit, and left him standing there in his piss
Embarrassed, he sits starring, i see rage in his eyes
The type'a face to raise satan, see the hatred inside
He climbs to his feet, slowly walks closer to them
Swings his beer bottle hard, it explodes on his head
Starts choking her neck, you can hear the fear in her cries
Hes yelling, you bitch, you never took me serious, why!?!?!
Tears in her eyes stop rolling, she collapse to the ground
Cheers, screams and laughs all pass through the crowd
Police crash through the loud people, capture the fellon
Cuffs on his hands, arrested, wakes up in a cell and...
Doesnt remember a damn thing, until somebody tells him
Charges are aggravated assault nd murder, caught under surveilence

Bodey · 12-31-2014, 04:03 AM

Idk how nobody has commented this yet. It was completely solid. Rhymes on point, easy flowing read. You sound like you do a lot of people-watching. And a bar is a perfect place to do it, FORREAL. Laughed out loud at the "goddammit, the bitch" line. Loved how you got more and more personal and of course the twist at the end. Good shit man. We needa collab again soon. You get my creative juices flowing

Eviscerate · 01-03-2015, 02:07 PM

superior.

u always been nice at that story telling shit.

100

KennyCerealBowl · 01-04-2015, 04:17 AM

Dope man

12-25-2014, 12:24 PM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	The Bar Scene. Destructively drunk, slurring, cuss at a bitch Bartenders favorite customer, that doesnt tip Pool table, cue balls, stools, cup full of chips Potential arsenol in case surroundung company trips Its a tough crowd, but i always love this watering hole A place where trashy broads in dirty clothes certainly rome Far cry further from home, than the dump on my block That nobody goes to cause its smothered with cops Im a couple of shots deep, a few beers and some dope So i go in the bathroom, and notice the mirrors are broke I pay close attention to everything, when i observe Chick at the bar has a light reflection, next to her purse Im guessin shit went down, that revolves around her Guy buying her drinks, knuckles are mauled and obscured He doesnt think anyone sees, all the blood where hes hurt Stumbling from the corner, comes the man who was split Wondering where his wife is, goddamnit, the bitch She watched him get hit, and left him standing there in his piss Embarrassed, he sits starring, i see rage in his eyes The type'a face to raise satan, see the hatred inside He climbs to his feet, slowly walks closer to them Swings his beer bottle hard, it explodes on his head Starts choking her neck, you can hear the fear in her cries Hes yelling, you bitch, you never took me serious, why!?!?! Tears in her eyes stop rolling, she collapse to the ground Cheers, screams and laughs all pass through the crowd Police crash through the loud people, capture the fellon Cuffs on his hands, arrested, wakes up in a cell and... Doesnt remember a damn thing, until somebody tells him Charges are aggravated assault nd murder, caught under surveilence __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est* Last edited by Geno; 12-25-2014 at 12:28 PM.

01-03-2015, 02:07 PM	#3
Eviscerate stokely carmichael of rap Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 144 Rep Power: 3155074	superior. u always been nice at that story telling shit. 100 __________________ i used to do that here..

01-04-2015, 04:17 AM	#4
KennyCerealBowl Do what is right. Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 769 Rep Power: 954121	Dope man __________________