How i feel

KennyCerealBowl · 12-10-2014, 10:19 PM

Things arent looking bright such a stupid day
I hope theres something i can do to shoot this pain
Used to be full of joy, how itd get destroyed
My therapist just sits and listens to this noise
My only wish is to do what im supposed to do
And i don't really know so whats my next move?
I tell em' atleast you know your path
'atleast if you got lost you still got your map
At the same time i dont wanna be directed
Cuz this is my script so you can die takkng the exit.

I'm so fuckin lazy ain't nothing to say
Can't get off bed representation of my grace
What happend to being full of life,
I want something more than just live & die
Since i was kid they always told,
Thats just how it is
How would you know?
They tell me you need to get your mind back from pluto
You need to do this if u wanna live like me though
Oh.. yah ya mean a medicore?
But the dress is realistic, guess i get it when i get older

Geno · 12-11-2014, 02:57 PM

This was a lot better than the other post i just read from you. Almost like they were written by two different people? Your language is more clear to read and not as broken. Words that you typically forget to use, u did not here. Either this was just well thought out and you took ur time writing it... or you didnt write it all. Just my opinion. Correct me if im wrong.. but im sure others would agree if they payed as kuch attention to it as i did. Either way and anyhow.. i enjoyed this. Probably the best ive seej from you. Keep writing

KennyCerealBowl · 12-11-2014, 06:55 PM

Goodlooking gen

12-10-2014, 10:19 PM	#1
KennyCerealBowl Do what is right. Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 769 Rep Power: 954121	How i feel Things arent looking bright such a stupid day I hope theres something i can do to shoot this pain Used to be full of joy, how itd get destroyed My therapist just sits and listens to this noise My only wish is to do what im supposed to do And i don't really know so whats my next move? I tell em' atleast you know your path 'atleast if you got lost you still got your map At the same time i dont wanna be directed Cuz this is my script so you can die takkng the exit. I'm so fuckin lazy ain't nothing to say Can't get off bed representation of my grace What happend to being full of life, I want something more than just live & die Since i was kid they always told, Thats just how it is How would you know? They tell me you need to get your mind back from pluto You need to do this if u wanna live like me though Oh.. yah ya mean a medicore? But the dress is realistic, guess i get it when i get older __________________ Last edited by KennyCerealBowl; 12-10-2014 at 10:32 PM.

12-11-2014, 02:57 PM	#2
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	This was a lot better than the other post i just read from you. Almost like they were written by two different people? Your language is more clear to read and not as broken. Words that you typically forget to use, u did not here. Either this was just well thought out and you took ur time writing it... or you didnt write it all. Just my opinion. Correct me if im wrong.. but im sure others would agree if they payed as kuch attention to it as i did. Either way and anyhow.. i enjoyed this. Probably the best ive seej from you. Keep writing __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

12-11-2014, 06:55 PM	#3
KennyCerealBowl Do what is right. Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 769 Rep Power: 954121	Goodlooking gen __________________