Malachi vs. CymbiCort - MALACHI WINS

NEWBIE 2013
ROUND 1

No swaying, biting, feeding, recycling

Line Limits

-10 Minimum
-14 Maximum

First person to drop can edit only until the 2nd person drops.

2nd person can edit only until the first vote is submitted

DUE: Saturday, 11:59 PM Pacific Standard Time

Extensions are available at request until Sunday 11:59 PM Pacific Standard Time, exactly 24 hours later.

Good Luck

@Malachi @CymbiCort

[Malachi]

check

12 lines @CymbiCort ?

[CymbiCort]

12 lines it is @Malachi

[Malachi]

@CymbiCort

extension bud?

[CymbiCort]

Yes @ Malachi

[CymbiCort]

You still droppin M?

[Malachi]

Originally Posted by CymbiCort

You still droppin M?

yeah

[Malachi]

@CymbiCort

Yo im a kid but not near this lamest of the lames, christ!
Is this nigga cym, 3? guess im gon beat that game twice
He be on my dick hard, you can tell hes a freaking coward
You know this nigga gay, when mal cum around he be screaming black power
Im always next to pussy its a known fact u fuckin bum
If any body lickin cym balls its a special ed kid playin drums
The chicks he pull are ugly and got acne, jeez
IF i ever said simpulltens its a shot at his personality
Your shits wack man you gotta be doin this shit on purpose
Boredom crushed you, now you know what its like reading one of ya verses
My game brings the fire and his is like luke warm, the poor guy...
but really, youd have to visit Miami to see any heat at courtside

[Malachi]

You can have another day @CymbiCort if meth allows

[CymbiCort]

that diss isn't hard bro...ask me what i think of this broad yo
I'll respond like bruno cuz "yeah, i'd tea bag M' for the award, sho"
My styles stick like snot from ya nose, i'm knockin ya hoes
You couldn't be wit cym's, son watchin that show
i got the type of rhyme that lures a plagiarist
Ya record got more L's than lifestyles of da poor and dangerous
I ain't gay so trust me chicks pay me to bang some nuts...
Cuz C straight unlike u after u snort angeldust
put a pound thru ya tissue, n let rounds sink down to ur ribs dude
Without walkin away from the T.V. to leave mal calm in the middle

[CymbiCort]

Verses in @Meth @Malachi

[Flow]

CYM 3 was a legit attempt but didn't work
Again your mal cum line is a legit attempt an misses... You've got ya word flip but it dont work both ways or it does but not insulting... So he sees Malcolm he says black power. Ok. He sees you cum, set up is he's gay, how does him shouting black power deliver the sting?
Ok the CYM balls is a played hit on him however you came fresh with it and I really liked this, had the lol factor an was worded lovely IMO
Cynpultens is solid, first line set up where it was going an the name flip hits smooth.
Boredom line hits but don't think I'd quote, too played
Your close seemed forced with the poor guy finish and the punch wasn't very directed but a legit attempt all the same

CYM I liked your opener but felt forced an could of been worded to hit harder but was a legit an fresh attempt
Lol your Simpsons line works as a wordflip but didn't hit....at all IMO
Meh the ls lifestyle line was so so I didn't really enjoy it
Your nameflipping yourself again? You should be using his man. An again this line did nothing for me, but it's a legit attempt, actually quite creative compared to your others but wasn't hard hitting IMO
Ok mal calm inthe middle was ya first legit name flip with a nice concept but again no sting unless I'm
Missing something your leaving him calm in the middle.... Not really seeing the punch in this

Voting mal for the hardest hits of the match with CYM balls and cympultens

[just rap]

Im always next to pussy its a known fact u fuckin bum
If any body lickin cym balls its a special ed kid playin drums

vs

put a pound thru ya tissue, n let rounds sink down to ur ribs dude
Without walkin away from the T.V. to leave mal calm in the middle

Not a fan of nameplays, but the couplets I liked from each were nameplays.

I liked the first one more, so

vMalachi

[R!canTheoryz]

Vote - Malachi. Alot of played material bein thrown around here
I voted for mal cuz he was slightly more creative and highly better executed here.
Less misses I would say

[Allen Knight]

Bordem crushed u

Vs

Award sho

V/mal, both need work this was close cy had ok concepts wording was weak work on that.
Mal had a cum line lmao no dog never agian but ur wording decent concepts need work but i liked that bordom bar close but mal wins

[Split]

Originally Posted by Malachi

@CymbiCort

Yo im a kid but not near this lamest of the lames, christ!
Is this nigga cym, 3? guess im gon beat that game twice
> nigga u can't beat Sims 3. Sims 3 beats you. Also meh,
He be on my dick hard, you can tell hes a freaking coward
You know this nigga gay, when mal cum around he be screaming black power
> dope concept kinda? Ur sayin he's gay for you? Also didnt work both ways
Im always next to pussy its a known fact u fuckin bum
If any body lickin cym balls its a special ed kid playin drums
>lmao. but played
The chicks he pull are ugly and got acne, jeez
IF i ever said simpulltens its a shot at his personality
> this was dope but could use work on wording
Your shits wack man you gotta be doin this shit on purpose
Boredom crushed you, now you know what its like reading one of ya verses
> dope personal even tho it's simple
My game brings the fire and his is like luke warm, the poor guy...
but really, youd have to visit Miami to see any heat at courtside
>good but didnt hit too hard cus you had 3x pussy bars

Word, you need
1) MORE angles with your name flips. everything that wasnt a name flip, was simple
2) less name flips, they really get old. It's still a personal attack even if u don't have their name in the bar
3) wording... It's pretty smooth reading, but your punches don't really work both ways, I.e. it reads as a statement and a personal attack... If that makes sense

Originally Posted by CymbiCort

that diss isn't hard bro...ask me what i think of this broad yo
I'll respond like bruno cuz "yeah, i'd tea bag M' for the award, sho"
> didnt like.
My styles stick like snot from ya nose, i'm knockin ya hoes
You couldn't be wit cym's, son watchin that show
>didnt hit hard
i got the type of rhyme that lures a plagiarist
Ya record got more L's than lifestyles of da poor and dangerous
> eh, bad but ok
I ain't gay so trust me chicks pay me to bang some nuts...
Cuz C straight unlike u after u snort angeldust
>self name flips still wack
put a pound thru ya tissue, n let rounds sink down to ur ribs dude
Without walkin away from the T.V. to leave mal calm in the middle
>ok nice

Cym's only good bar was his last one. Simpleton and Boredom easily took this. CYM was too complicated and not hard hitting enough, Malachi needs some fine tuning and better angles but clearly beat Cym here


V/ malachi

[SiK]

Mal Wins