01-22-2018, 02:50 PM | #1 |
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Darker Ego vs. classickERBL - CLASSICK WINS
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Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE! THERE’S BEEN A LOT OF COMPLAINTS ABOUT VOTING RECENTLY, IF THERE IS SOMEONE WHO YOU DON’T WANT TO VOTE IN YOUR BATTLE YOU MUST STATE THEIR NAME IN YOUR CHECK IN. IF IT’S A CRAZY AMOUNT OF PEOPLE THEN SORRY YOU’RE JUST A BITCH AND ALL VOTES WILL COUNT. AS PER ORC @Darker Ego @classickERBL Last edited by For Battling; 01-22-2018 at 05:35 PM. |
01-23-2018, 09:17 AM | #2 |
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check...im down for whatever
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01-24-2018, 02:53 PM | #3 |
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@Darker Ego what we doing ? 16 ?
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01-24-2018, 08:00 PM | #4 |
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01-25-2018, 10:15 AM | #5 |
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Nothing classic about it you only steaming like a kettle!!
Your verse should come with a label that says "Easy to assemble!!" Wouldn`t consider your words holy if you were preaching from a temple!! Contenders melt under degrees that are infernal, On this possession puking pieces of metal, A cold winter cloud invades freezing their internal Through these 16 lines? Your blood flow like exposing a nerve!! Its purposely absurd and actually more than you deserve I am fly like pegasus above the clouds abruptly I swerve with ya carcass gored to throw it in the curve Golden hits this Drunken miss can`t handle an open diss But persist, Its like You throwing punches with broken fist You never make it to the top like sunken ships!! the monster picking teeth of meat crush to bits Drop you so hard it`ll cause the earth polar crust to shift!! Enjoy the space among stars and aliens this is just a lift, You get smoke faster than 5 Jamaicans vs just a spliff!!
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01-25-2018, 12:17 PM | #6 |
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This when I start incisions, cannon flash bringin some light to Darker visions
Smart precision...heavy gun, the kick make me go back and forth its a hard decision No regular tex , im the type character to send a deeper message,knife game dirty ,catch a mean infection The ink I write with deadly , u get lead when the arm pointing if u need direction Stop speaking reckless or u’ll leak intestines and all ya guts hangin bucks aimin , that will bring this bitch ego down like slut shaming Them lines u spit?….Not godly..i’ll give this kin the z’s , bob marley Then turn up with ratchets on deck by the boatload like a yacht party Long round hit his chess 1st , he strugle with bars I got more to feed u, let off all the eagles Fuck what his self worth , this double U gon leave his personality split , I alter Ego’s I aint meant to diss the site, we all make mistakes so put that on a tab partner Yo rhymes trash , u dont even jab proper , I punch outta hunger like Math hoffa Me and the crew catch bodies and cut em to pieces , live in the cut Reel lines , if they catch the bait den we start choppin it up ! |
01-25-2018, 03:56 PM | #7 |
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Yooo Classick you're getting it man. Your wording is much better. See?! You can still do the association shit. You can still do the hard, gutter, BARS. Just need to tweak the style to make it hit on this side of the web. That was my point. If something is dope it's dope no matter what. Anyway -- the opener was fluid, the bar itself was smooth and a nice way to begin. Arm pointing was simple to me, need a bit more if it's an arm bar. Slut shaming lol nice. Rachets on deck a little too simple again for my taste. Alter Egos a nice concept. Hoffa line was okay. Last line reel is played in text, would work live. Overall I dug the style this week. It's dope that you've made the effort to come and stick around here and alter your style to win. Respect.
Darker Ego, your verse had nice rhymes but no substance. You need to read a lot more battles from others in the league. Learn how to formulate a witty punch. That's what is missing at the moment. PM me for pointers if you're stuck. CLASS got it |
01-25-2018, 04:16 PM | #8 |
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Class got this EASY.
Great wordplay and name flips. Alter ego line was great, slut shaming line went hard and a few other really solid set ups in there. Darker Ego ..you jus don’t seem like you understand the concept of set ups. The set ups are often just as or even more important than the punch line. You had one or two lines that were okay bro ..but elevate. Class got you pretty easy here V/Class |
01-25-2018, 07:11 PM | #9 |
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pretty one sided tbh
Opener was done well, second needed trimming on the setup its not like it added much but okay punch, if you tidied up the alter ego's bar it would of been pretty good, still okay. Dark well yeh you need to put some thought into what your doing, your writing like its a basic open mic. You need to have more than just rhyming bud. vote classic |
01-25-2018, 08:09 PM | #10 |
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I think Classick took this pretty handily.
Hard decision and Slut shaming were stand outs. Nice flips. Alter egos is nice too. Ego -- the opener was a little bit amusing and showed potential, but it went downhill from there. The imagery and construction was dope, but there wasn't a lot of payoff in terms of hard disses or punchlines. You're a good writer, this just isn't a very good *battle* verse. Vote -- Classick
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01-25-2018, 11:49 PM | #11 |
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Yea class def took this one. Its a diff style kinda comes off as a swag n flow verse tbh opener was cool.. the double u/splittin personality hit.. overall good shit.
Dark.. I cant rlly quote nothin from ya. Read sum more battles n shit ull get it V/ class |
01-26-2018, 12:57 AM | #12 |
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CLASSICK ERBL
Darker Ego homie you really, truly, sincerely need to study what set-ups & punchlines are, then structure your verses in that manner. Otherwise you will lose every single battle you enter in. Class that was decent, still you're doing too much scheming compared to your punching. Against a better opponent, you'll likely get beat up..real talk. Shit, some of these fags even say I use too many multies..lol, so be wary.
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01-26-2018, 03:23 PM | #13 |
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Nothing classic about it you only steaming like a kettle!!
Your verse should come with a label that says "Easy to assemble!!" youve got the right idea but this wasn’t tough at all Wouldn`t consider your words holy if you were preaching from a temple!! setup? Contenders melt under degrees that are infernal, On this possession puking pieces of metal, A cold winter cloud invades freezing their internal ahh you’re a topical head, I get it now. That’s good and bad. Bad because you rely simply on smooth rhyming, good because you understand how to incorporate multis Through these 16 lines? Your blood flow like exposing a nerve!! Its purposely absurd and actually more than you deserve eh I am fly like pegasus above the clouds abruptly I swerve with ya carcass gored to throw it in the curve Golden hits this Drunken miss can`t handle an open diss But persist, Its like You throwing punches with broken fist You never make it to the top like sunken ships!! the monster picking teeth of meat crush to bits Drop you so hard it`ll cause the earth polar crust to shift!! Enjoy the space among stars and aliens this is just a lift, You get smoke faster than 5 Jamaicans vs just a spliff!! yeah Man basically you just have to work on setup/punchline delivery, making your concepts creative and original Vs This when I start incisions, cannon flash bringin some light to Darker visions Smart precision...heavy gun, the kick make me go back and forth its a hard decision sheesh, this was nice. No regular tex , im the type character to send a deeper message,knife game dirty ,catch a mean infection The ink I write with deadly , u get lead when the arm pointing if u need direction nice again, just work on shortening the lines a bit, maybe don’t try to incorporate too much? Still good tho Stop speaking reckless or u’ll leak intestines and all ya guts hangin bucks aimin , that will bring this bitch ego down like slut shaming alright Them lines u spit?….Not godly..i’ll give this kin the z’s , bob marley Then turn up with ratchets on deck by the boatload like a yacht party ok not bad Long round hit his chess 1st , he strugle with bars I got more to feed u, let off all the eagles Fuck what his self worth , this double U gon leave his personality split , I alter Ego’s FIRE I aint meant to diss the site, we all make mistakes so put that on a tab partner Yo rhymes trash , u dont even jab proper , I punch outta hunger like Math hoffa hoffa concepts are played man Me and the crew catch bodies and cut em to pieces , live in the cut Reel lines , if they catch the bait den we start choppin it up ! ehh Classick caught a BODY here. Next gen @MFtastick in the making?! Good shit bro, everything except the last 2 bars were quotes. Darker Ego you gotta figure out how to transcend from topical to text. Vote classick |
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