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View Poll Results: Who do you expect to win this battle? | |||
Boredom | 3 | 100.00% | |
Jo E. Murder | 0 | 0% | |
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01-29-2013, 07:08 PM | #1 |
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Boredom (1-1) vs. Jo E. Murder (1-1) BOREDOM WINS
4 bars/8 lines
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01-29-2013, 11:04 PM | #2 |
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easy.
fuck the chit chat, i heard a slut say that i am not raw rofl...that came straight from a horses mouth..so i broke ur moms jaw i'm the illest so i'm coppin the dub w/ out a fuckin doubt faggot if ur up to snuff it's cause i used a snub nose to snuff u out ur into some weird shit,strap ons n girls clothes, ya heads fucked fucking faggot.i can gaurentee ur lines aren't the only thing u dress up i'll send this lame to the spirit world w/ out snappin ur neck fuck a seyance i'll unload a clip in ghost to make him astral project |
01-31-2013, 01:53 PM | #3 | |
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- Hes from big bad Vancouver, where he acclaims where actual murder resides. (Just wanna put that out there with a picture) "Big Bad Vancouver" P.S. Fuck this Canadien, infact fuck Canada. Aight. Fuck them.... Bore couldnt withstand the martyr! If anythings good, its like a Walmart cashier... he's "scannin' bars quick!" [/EZ.] So how hes even hot as Joe? Im giving "Bo's a shocking flow..." without ensuring the "staff that Gambit charges!" We wouldn't applaud him for his boring or awful writin'! Fuck a MacMillan: I'll tell you Boredom is "not excitement!" The rook's so rubbish! "Jay-Z's promotion failure" - the way "he couldnt push Jo buttons" - so how he raw at liners? (Look below: See that quote) Quote:
I've coffin contenders! Cool story, so if someone barge in with weapons, what? You'd play a song when he enters? I think the true facts is his music more hard-core than him, and when it comes to explicit... its CONTENT'S OFFENSIVE! :eek: #YoureWelcomed I'll pop lead from the pistol! The way it's "shreddin' through tissue" - you'd be thinking it was "interrupted sneezes!" He'd buck a heater to bruise a brotha? NAH! - Because "Boredom's doing nothing" - WHAT A "DOUBLE MEANING!" |
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02-01-2013, 04:44 PM | #4 |
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Boredom
lol'd at opener dress up lines was lotb Joe nothing really (Also, Canadian*) your punches weren't very strong. what made sense was corny. the formatting was pointless and unnecessary. take a break and read some battles, get a sense of how to construct a good nameflip, which your best attempts were based on and keep working. V/ Boredom |
02-01-2013, 05:47 PM | #5 |
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fuck the chit chat, i heard a slut say that i am not raw
rofl...that came straight from a horses mouth..so i broke ur moms jaw ur into some weird shit,strap ons n girls clothes, ya heads fucked fucking faggot.i can gaurentee ur lines aren't the only thing u dress up vs The rook's so rubbish! "Jay-Z's promotion failure" - the way "he couldnt push Jo buttons" - so how he raw at liners? Joe's verse was like 16 lines imo. Way too stretched, that even if the concept was delivered..it was too far apart to connect with all the extra wording. Basically making each line two lines. And the quotes/pics doesnt help either. Boredom just appealed more to my preference in text battles here. Set ups and punches. The dress up personal was LotB to me loool @ that line. V/Boredom
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02-01-2013, 08:40 PM | #6 | |
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02-01-2013, 08:59 PM | #7 |
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A wise man once said that text battles are more like ice skating competitions rather than basketball games. The winner is decided by the preference of the voter. So when you come to a shortbar site with longbar, you're not going to get many votes. Everyone sees your verses as bad, even if they're good. Which they're not btw. You use so many words that it takes too long for the concepts to touch base, which severely decreases the impact of the punch. If you were really good at longbar, I would see more votes going your way. But considering that you have little knowledge on how to craft a battle verse, let alone deliver a punch really hurts your chances of winning any battles here. This site, the people that settle here, are all about concise wording and effective delivery. The style that you have brought here absolutely goes against both qualities in every way. You know how to rhyme, cool. Your multis aren't bad. However, we do not vote based on your multis. I, at least, vote on whether or not your punches are relevant and direct. Yours are not.
You don't have to count this, but v/Boredom |
02-01-2013, 09:51 PM | #8 |
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Sup fag @Joe E. Murder
Aha, uppin ko |
02-02-2013, 12:20 AM | #9 | ||
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aight homebrew. complete breakdown at your request. And for the record I have no bias for or against longbar, I prefer to write in shorter bars but whatever you feel like is your voice is your voice. More power to you.
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02-02-2013, 03:54 PM | #10 |
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