Greed 0-1 Vs Iamrhetoric 0-1 - GREED WINS

[Allen Knight]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, June 18th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!

@____ @IAmRhetoric

[IAmRhetoric]

14?

[Greed]

Sent 14 @IAmRhetoric

[IAmRhetoric]

____ AKA Greedy

When I'm shooting, rare that my pistol misses..
Get this, my shots goin' straight to ya top like a hit of guiness.
Rapping isn't for you, pick a new career Greed,
Cuz tonight i'm catching a body like a high school cheer team..
Don't go soft Greedy, hold ya' toaster,
Fuck w/ me and arms goin up in the air like a roller coaster
I am the lone beholder, I hold the people's chain..
Touch the belt n the hawks coming out no eagles game..
Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment..
You kid? you're none the wiser,
Cuz you're getting killed for being Greedy... like Mekhi Phifer*
Agreeing to battle me? there's a price to pay
Fitting kid's name is ___, all I have to do is check mark to sign his life away

**If you haven't watched Paid in Full, don't even fucking vote on this battle you ignorant fucking faggot. Go watch it. Best movie.

aaaah.. i'm getting better. @Sharp @Greedy

[Greed]

I read that long ass verse last week, terrible, seemed like voters felt the same way
..FUCK the parable lines you had, THAT was just a horrible misuse of nameplay
Ill litterally embarrass u, come here so i can smack that nerd face
Stupid nigga, u'd have a para... dimes shift to lesbian with that wack ass wordplay
Allen knight changed my name back to greed, and 4 that im gonna to make him pay
.. Dont change the fact ur blank expressions leaves voters with the same look anyways
Im real estate and you burger king, you can feel the hate in the murder scene
The only thing you'd reel estate of an emergency after i'd give the burner a squeeze
I stay losing battles. I laugh cause i know im the best in
See itd be funny if i ask why no one liked me.. thats a rhetorical question
I have no chill.. i aint with that birdwatching or sit patient
.. When Iam under control im curbstomping this kids face in
I dont wanna hear that 'i really be out here' all loud like u got the method
Bitch the Only thing u turn up is the TV to drown the sound of your own depression

[Sharp]

For fucks sake

Greed aka pryde

Greedy is not on NC

[8===D~~~~(}:]

Lmfao he really needs to change his name, us rb folk don't know the difference between the two

[Ronin]

This was a decent battle. I would do a line by line break down but im on my phone n its a pain in the ass. So, both had some good lines. Rhetoric had cheer team line which was worded good and hit, wasn't great but it was good. Same with the roller coaster line, nothing special but it was good. Spa treatment line was aite. I haven't seen paid in full bit I'm still voting so go fuck yourself fgt. I also thought ur closer was decent.

Greed's verse was wordy and had some bad wording on top of it lol. As a whole it was kinda mediocre, not good but not bad. Some of his wordplay was forced and didn't make sense or fit. He did have a couple good lines tho, blank expressions could've been good with better wording. I like the turn up ur TV line too that worded right n it hit.

Overall I gotta give it to rhetoric who had the cleaner verse, I'm not big on gunplay bars but his were aite. Greeds verse was too wordy for me. He had some OK concepts but his wording hurt him.

V/ iamrhetoric

[Allen Knight]

-1 vote for greed

-4 for Rhetoric for missing votes

[IAmRhetoric]

Originally Posted by Allen Knight

-1 vote for greed

-4 for Rhetoric for missing votes

did you not see my votes in the thread it's specifically made for?

[Allen Knight]

Originally Posted by IAmRhetoric

did you not see my votes in the thread it's specifically made for?

Did u not see u didnt vote last week.

[Kill Spree]

Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment.(barley)




vs


Im real estate and you burger king, you can feel the hate in the murder scene
The only thing you'd reel estate of an emergency after i'd give the burner a squeeze
I dont wanna hear that 'i really be out here' all loud like u got the method
Bitch the Only thing u turn up is the TV to drown the sound of your own depression


nothing wowing here. both came with some generic bars. rhets shit was played. his closer could have been dope. greed really brought nothing hype to the table imo. but had better misses and two quotables

v/greed

[ill nik-A]

Ummm its 2015 and dude is still explaining bars with asterisks?! Nahhh this can't be
Anyway wasn't a fan of the verse
Prides best line was the depression one which I thought was creative

V pride

[Destroyer]

rhetoric stuff was mostly played
spa treatment was decent
greed had state of emergency and turn up the TV

v/greed

[Sn00p]

When I'm shooting, rare that my pistol misses..
Get this, my shots goin' straight to ya top like a hit of guiness.
^uhm, either u're talking about shots of guiness which makes not a lot of sense since nobody drinks shots of that, or the connection is just go to the top/head like alcohol. which is kinda basic. idk. this could'a been way better if u incorporated the shots part & maybe evn expanded more on the concept. becuz the connection u had was a little simple and cud'a been fresher
Rapping isn't for you, pick a new career Greed,
Cuz tonight i'm catching a body like a high school cheer team..
^again, this could'a been dope. but the delivery is kinda statementish & simple. it cud'a been smth like "run up on u w/ the gang / i trust my team when it comes to catching bodies, like a high school cheer leader". not this exact flip, cuz i just made this up in seconds, but expand on the connection a bit more. cuz the idea was rly dope. it just needs a bit better delivery. still a good line overall.
Don't go soft Greedy, hold ya' toaster,
Fuck w/ me and arms goin up in the air like a roller coaster
^same as above. still decent
I am the lone beholder, I hold the people's chain..
Touch the belt n the hawks coming out no eagles game..
^okay, this is def a trend. u have good ideas, but expand on them some more to make the connection stronger so they have more impact. this was okay
Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment..
^decent
You kid? you're none the wiser,
Cuz you're getting killed for being Greedy... like Mekhi Phifer
^yea. same. use ur setups too. smth like "make u die for ur name" in the setup. or smth. but dont just do similes w/ a simple connections that's not enough nowadays
Agreeing to battle me? there's a price to pay
Fitting kid's name is ___, all I have to do is check mark to sign his life away
^eh. sign his life away? doesn't rly work for me

vs.

I read that long ass verse last week, terrible, seemed like voters felt the same way
..FUCK the parable lines you had, THAT was just a horrible misuse of nameplay
^uhm. pair a bill? or is there no wp? eh.
Ill litterally embarrass u, come here so i can smack that nerd face
Stupid nigga, u'd have a para... dimes shift to lesbian with that wack ass wordplay
^pair a dimes is rly played. i've seen it yrs ago and it was called played then. i get that u're saying that he uses that kinda wp, but he didn't use the exact wp iirc and u did.
Allen knight changed my name back to greed, and 4 that im gonna to make him pay
.. Dont change the fact ur blank expressions leaves voters with the same look anyways
^gonna to make? proofreading ur verses rly helps preventing these small typos that throw ppl off. this could'a been dope tho. like, the concept is nice. but the wording is kinda all over the place. if this had been a streamlined, concise line, it would'a hit for sure
Im real estate and you burger king, you can feel the hate in the murder scene
The only thing you'd reel estate of an emergency after i'd give the burner a squeeze
^okay. setup's kinda blah tho. i'm real estate, u're burger king? ehh. could'a made the connection a lot stronger in the 1st line. the wp feels a bit forced w/ the wording
I stay losing battles. I laugh cause i know im the best in
See itd be funny if i ask why no one liked me.. thats a rhetorical question
^aite. concept cool, wording cud'a been a bit better
I have no chill.. i aint with that birdwatching or sit patient
.. When Iam under control im curbstomping this kids face in
^iam under control? why is he under control if u're curbstomping him? are u called control? are ur shoes called control? idk. this doesn't rly work for me.
I dont wanna hear that 'i really be out here' all loud like u got the method
Bitch the Only thing u turn up is the TV to drown the sound of your own depression
^lol. that punchline was unexpected. which is rly nice w/ punchlines. so yea, cool line

standouts were catch a body vs. depression. depression was a pretty fresh spin imo. i think i liked it more. but i also liked spa & roller coaster from rhet. so yea, i think i have him here. more hits. and kinda cleaner wording, if a bit on the basic side. concepts were kinda basic too, so they cud easily be played. but i don't remember seeing these flips unlike paradime. but yo. don't take this as me being overly critical cuz i'm hating on y'all. i'm just tryna show u what ppl think when they look at ur bars. and i ask the questions u can rly ask urself to find weak spots in ur verses. so yea. if i'm being harsh, it's to show u were the room for improvement is. overall, this was a close battle with some rly nice ideas tho. so props to both. i got rhet on more hits/consistency.
v/iamrhet

[~RustyGunZ~]

turn up tv was the only cool concept

rhet came super played

otherwise greed sucked and those wordplays were cringe worthy

v/neckhole

[fraze]

Originally Posted by IAmRhetoric

When I'm shooting, rare that my pistol misses..
Get this, my shots goin' straight to ya top like a hit of guiness.
This is boring, being honest. Its been done before so need to flip it more creative
Rapping isn't for you, pick a new career Greed,
Cuz tonight i'm catching a body like a high school cheer team..
Also played. Need more creativity.
Don't go soft Greedy, hold ya' toaster,
Fuck w/ me and arms goin up in the air like a roller coaster
This isn't worded harsh and is played
I am the lone beholder, I hold the people's chain..
Touch the belt n the hawks coming out no eagles game..
Simple word association, no real flip here
Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment..
Not feeling this.
You kid? you're none the wiser,
Cuz you're getting killed for being Greedy... like Mekhi Phifer*
this was cool, but reference is obscure
Agreeing to battle me? there's a price to pay
Fitting kid's name is ___, all I have to do is check mark to sign his life away
liked the concept but you didn't flip it well enough to hit
y

Originally Posted by Greed

I read that long ass verse last week, terrible, seemed like voters felt the same way
..FUCK the parable lines you had, THAT was just a horrible misuse of nameplay
aight
Ill litterally embarrass u, come here so i can smack that nerd face
Stupid nigga, u'd have a para... dimes shift to lesbian with that wack ass wordplay
this is ok
Allen knight changed my name back to greed, and 4 that im gonna to make him pay
.. Dont change the fact ur blank expressions leaves voters with the same look anyways
not harsh but ok.
Im real estate and you burger king, you can feel the hate in the murder scene
The only thing you'd reel estate of an emergency after i'd give the burner a squeeze
nope
I stay losing battles. I laugh cause i know im the best in
See itd be funny if i ask why no one liked me.. thats a rhetorical question
cool concept but didn't set it up well
I have no chill.. i aint with that birdwatching or sit patient
.. When Iam under control im curbstomping this kids face in
nah
I dont wanna hear that 'i really be out here' all loud like u got the method
Bitch the Only thing u turn up is the TV to drown the sound of your own depression
meh

Rheteric was cool but a lot of the bars were played so it doesn't end up being as strong of a verse as it could have been. Greed had a few misses but easily had the better verse.

Vote: Greed

[Sharp]

Call my bullets muscle relaxers, and when I see'em?
He gettin the full body puncture w/o paying for spa treatment..



Allen knight changed my name back to greed, and 4 that im gonna to make him pay
.. Dont change the fact ur blank expressions leaves voters with the same look anyways
I stay losing battles. I laugh cause i know im the best in
See itd be funny if i ask why no one liked me.. thats a rhetorical question


was stingy with the quotes tbh. ok battle but i got blank expressions as lotb so greed has my edge

v/greed