11-19-2018, 10:58 PM | #1 |
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Round 2: Kim Jong Un vs. Fidel Castro - KIM JONG UN WINS
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11-20-2018, 02:05 PM | #2 |
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FIDEL CASTRO HAS CHECKED IN
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11-20-2018, 09:00 PM | #3 |
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11-22-2018, 04:57 AM | #4 |
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Fidel Castro’s Verse:
I'm the face of Communism, you're a Neo conservative who's so so shook oh yea, why does your PR staff always recommend the Morpheus dojo look? we hold the world record in sanctions, tradin wit me is not even an option I'm a growling beast, sorta like the bellys of all those poor people u starvin u gotta retired NBA diplomat, hope he doesn't plan on comin to Cuba but I hope he catches yah exwife on the rebound and slam dunks in her fupa lauginstock on the world front, Trump stopped your uranium enrichment me & Putin looked at eachother like, "this dickhead came up short, but hey it's a given" my Beard's trademarked, and you's a fake babyfaced dictator, it's true this Gerber will go across yah cheek quicker than a baby playing with food listen comrade, fly ya foriegn negotiators over here and them bitches won't land I'm drawing a line in the sand......sorta like how South Korea did your homeland Cuban missile crisis, we the last regime to have the world on the brink of war you flex a nuke? all we hear is a Funkmaster bomb drop when a new single is on I cry havoc and let slip the dogs of war, you cry wolf,don't push me motherfucker and for the record,the last time Lil Kim was hardcore, her pussy was on the cover |
11-22-2018, 04:58 AM | #5 |
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Kim Jong Un’s Verse:
HERRO FAGGOT screw ur career.. x-men were last round, aint no mutiny here plus we can’t tell what’s done more revoltin’ outta you or that beard ive the youthful appearance of Cartman & my height don’t got me feelin’ uneasy cuz Kim Jong Un look 6 foot one now this Cuban Heel is beneath me deal with ’em easy, since you mahfuckahs have BEEN soft.. watch as the big dog ‘Marxist territory’ since ur entire country are peons fuck ur ideologies too, no warfair when u’re steppin’ to Kim Jong for bein’ a guerilla in the 50’s, I put a pound to ur chest like King Kongs u left and quit once, now ur brother got us all bored to death.. must be the most boring cuban heirs this side of ill-nika’s Jordan threads ur a poor mans Lenin, so noones showin’ this bitch respect only known for ‘overthrowin’ excellence in the past’ like Bill and Ted ur chin been checked here, i stick ‘em and weave.. if revolutions in the air, the far right sent ur head spinnin’ 360 degrees history repeats itself too, ur protests n broke text both wacker in General the ‘capital-lies over ur dead body’ shit went out with u Havana burial Mahfuckah! |
11-22-2018, 07:19 AM | #6 |
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I'm the face of Communism, you're a Neo conservative who's so so shook
oh yea, why does your PR staff always recommend the Morpheus dojo look? nah lol we hold the world record in sanctions, tradin wit me is not even an option I'm a growling beast, sorta like the bellys of all those poor people u starvin ok here u gotta retired NBA diplomat, hope he doesn't plan on comin to Cuba but I hope he catches yah exwife on the rebound and slam dunks in her fupa lmao no man wtf lauginstock on the world front, Trump stopped your uranium enrichment me & Putin looked at eachother like, "this dickhead came up short, but hey it's a given" lol alright this was funny my Beard's trademarked, and you's a fake babyfaced dictator, it's true this Gerber will go across yah cheek quicker than a baby playing with food nah listen comrade, fly ya foriegn negotiators over here and them bitches won't land I'm drawing a line in the sand......sorta like how South Korea did your homeland mmmm this had potential for more but it was decent Cuban missile crisis, we the last regime to have the world on the brink of war you flex a nuke? all we hear is a Funkmaster bomb drop when a new single is on miss I cry havoc and let slip the dogs of war, you cry wolf,don't push me motherfucker and for the record,the last time Lil Kim was hardcore, her pussy was on the cover lol ok Vs screw ur career.. x-men were last round, aint no mutiny here plus we can’t tell what’s done more revoltin’ outta you or that beard not feelin this ive the youthful appearance of Cartman & my height don’t got me feelin’ uneasy cuz Kim Jong Un look 6 foot one now this Cuban Heel is beneath me wording is bad but this was decent deal with ’em easy, since you mahfuckahs have BEEN soft.. watch as the big dog ‘Marxist territory’ since ur entire country are peons this is nice regardless of the awkward wording towards the end of the second line fuck ur ideologies too, no warfair when u’re steppin’ to Kim Jong for bein’ a guerilla in the 50’s, I put a pound to ur chest like King Kongs pretty cool here u left and quit once, now ur brother got us all bored to death.. must be the most boring cuban heirs this side of ill-nika’s Jordan threads lmao cool but weird wording again ur a poor mans Lenin, so noones showin’ this bitch respect only known for ‘overthrowin’ excellence in the past’ like Bill and Ted had to look up the reference lol, not bad tho ur chin been checked here, i stick ‘em and weave.. if revolutions in the air, the far right sent ur head spinnin’ 360 degrees good history repeats itself too, ur protests n broke text both wacker in General the ‘capital-lies over ur dead body’ shit went out with u Havana burial nahhh Fidel had some ok lines in his verse but honestly there was nothing that really stood out to me. Kim’s Verse was way more consistent here and aside from his wording being gawd awful, he had some cool concepts and surely did enough to seal the win here imo. Vote Kim Jong Un |
11-22-2018, 09:50 AM | #7 |
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Fidel Castro: This read like a history lesson rather than a battle verse, punchlines were lacking a lot to me, be that either actual sting to the payoffs or just concepts letting them down. I thought more could have been done with that Lil Kim idea, the Gerber stuff was probably the better worded execution to a line but the link between the setup and punch was pretty tedious to me. The lead four lines got you off to a bad start and then it kind of never really recovered from there to me. The Putin/dickhead line was wayyy more comedic and that's the approach I feel you should have taken throughout on this one. There was so much potential ammo with Kim Jong Un and I feel it went wasted somewhat, whereas other battlers would have KILLED that persona. It was a real goldmine that went untapped by you here IMHO.
Kim Jong Un: You lucked out somewhat here, some decent ideas, seemed rushed to me in truth but there's enough in there for the win with that King Kong and revolution in the air lines. I think Marxist Territory is fire, not sure how that will go down but I enjoy it. I liked that you didn't go with the typical "Cuban cigar" or "Cig/sig/gun" route, or the "smoke this Cuban" obvious stuff, you went more creative and thats enjoyable. Bill and Ted line may go over peoples heads as it's not worded the best but the ideas okay. The closing line prob wasn't as good as you thought, either. I've got Kim Jong Un winning comfortably, Fidel fucked up himself really here and all but threw the match by not punching for half the battle and writing a history book. Vote - Kim Jong Un |
11-24-2018, 06:57 PM | #8 |
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Castro opener is ok I see the tie in in set up an sorta comical nice ice breaking start.
Next bar. Had all the ingredients felt it lacked execution. Sort of feel like you just need to move the pieces around here an it was good but as was it's an ok. Next three were nah. South Korea line sand ya best bar thus far and a solid hit clever liked. Then we miss again from memory. Then you had that funk master flex stuff. I'm guessing there's an angle here but however you were going about it I didn't really get it. Feel you jumbled shit here an it had similar issues to that second bar. Except second bar was still a hit. Closer was lol and cool. I enjoyed that up there with South Korea as ya best bars. My phone's dying an don't want to lose this so will edit an do the grand supreme leaders breakdown later. Ok Kim Opener was meh. Closer was meh. Everything inside that was solid. Consistent and the flow was lovely. Marxist was a clever wordplay and contextual tie in. Tbh everything even the opener and closer was very direct. Felt this is where the big lean comes in. Castro wasn't direct enough and Kim is just full of angles to attack hard on. Vote Kim consistent n direct
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11-25-2018, 08:28 PM | #9 |
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I have Kim as well, will break down here. Mostly based on consistency, his misses > fidel's misses
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we hold the world record in sanctions, tradin wit me is not even an option I'm a growling beast, sorta like the bellys of all those poor people u starvin u gotta retired NBA diplomat, hope he doesn't plan on comin to Cuba but I hope he catches yah exwife on the rebound and slam dunks in her fupa I cry havoc and let slip the dogs of war, you cry wolf,don't push me motherfucker and for the record,the last time Lil Kim was hardcore, her pussy was on the cover Im conflicted. Your verse was very consistent but it lacked haymakers. screw ur career.. x-men were last round, aint no mutiny here plus we can’t tell what’s done more revoltin’ outta you or that beard deal with ’em easy, since you mahfuckahs have BEEN soft.. watch as the big dog ‘Marxist territory’ since ur entire country are peons fuck ur ideologies too, no warfair when u’re steppin’ to Kim Jong for bein’ a guerilla in the 50’s, I put a pound to ur chest like King Kongs u left and quit once, now ur brother got us all bored to death.. must be the most boring cuban heirs this side of ill-nika’s Jordan threads ur chin been checked here, i stick ‘em and weave.. if revolutions in the air, the far right sent ur head spinnin’ 360 degrees I wasnt a fan of the closer but the rest of your lines hit hard for the most part. very close battle. I think Kim got it with the stronger punches... Vote- kim... Bye...
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11-25-2018, 09:44 PM | #12 |
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Kim Jong Un Wins 5-0
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