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im never awake just a sentient shape of a humanoid wasted in sessions i blaze till i lose my voice they gesticulate im a lazy and stupid boy just cos i graze in the haze with hugest joints now its making me too annoyed like playing your favourite tunes while you hate on my music choice! so im expending my hatred and venting my rage at my pallid reflection im met with disdain my eyes are crimson yet empty and glazed and cold as the wind in december that trembles your frame my pen full of flames has evolved into a robot spy cos everything i write on this site will get stolen by soulless types with frozen hearts sittin on their thrones of ice so everytime i hold a mic im feeling like they go to bite with open wide mandibles, damaging like cobra strikes so roll the dice and the play the game its fair to say you know the price.. |
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NJ Devil
Join Date: Jan 2013
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Last part was crazy
Ur dope
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Join Date: May 2013
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surprised to see this, good shit. the rhyming was crisp, good rhythm to it, overall a nice 16
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soulless types with frozen hearts sittin on their thrones of ice
so everytime i hold a mic im feeling like they go to bite with open wide mandibles, damaging like cobra strikes so roll the dice and the play the game its fair to say you know the price.. ^^ I like that alot it had everything u needed for a closer
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Join Date: Apr 2013
Location: California
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some vocab felt a little forced, a few grammar mistakes made a few lines awkward but overall the content was cool and was a solid piece
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