Eviction vs MaCe - EVICTION WINS BY NS

[Sharp]

Netcees SOL Season II
Week 3

Due Thursday, July 14th at Midnight PST

Minimum: 8 Lines
Maximum: 12 Lines
24hr ext given on request

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
You MUST check in
Don't edit after your opponent has posted
2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
Don't be an idiot
Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle
Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls

@Eviction @MaCe

[Eviction]

Originally Posted by MaCe

Kiss the rings ladies…I’ve read some recent battles and you’re all trash hahahaha

Some HOFers should stay in the archive's, his status was probably wrong.
If ladies kiss his ring, they’ll have to suck my dick to wash the poverty off.
This is a young man's game, you should have stayed in your place fam.
NC been tryna get rid of me so long, that sharp finally using the mace can.
From lifetime bans to free wins, guess this vet is no longer the guest of honor.
He used to be the shit, but he's more out of practice than Vanessa's daughter.
Maybe I'm missing the hype, if you hold the throne we should all bend at the knee.
Ur so used to dickryding on HF, that you still owe hush money to jin the emcee.

[MaCe]

I’m traveling this week, I’ll post tomorrow

[Sharp]

Some HOFers should stay in the archive's, his status was probably wrong.
If ladies kiss his ring, they’ll have to suck my dick to wash the poverty off.
I understand that you're trying to flip exactly what he said but I don't understand what the punch is... His ring is covered in poverty? And your dick is appearing out of nowhere. I could see a punch maybe related to the green residue left by cheap rings but I really don't understand why your dick is here
This is a young man's game, you should have stayed in your place fam.
NC been tryna get rid of me so long, that sharp finally using the mace can.
there's actually a cool concept here but on a bigger scale, it misses the opportunity to diss your opponent - I get that not all of rap/battle rap is about that but you have such a limited space that you can't really afford to miss a chance - and the wording is not good. Something that conveys 'I've been hit by an arsenal on NC, I'm not worried about a little MaCe' could have been pretty dope imo
From lifetime bans to free wins, guess this vet is no longer the guest of honor.
He used to be the shit, but he's more out of practice than Vanessa's daughter.
I just don't get this. If you're referencing a show or movie it helps to include it somewhere so people like me know what to google. Literally just saying

'think (show name). Used to be the shit but...

Wouldn't really fuck with delivery/wording at all in most cases.
Maybe I'm missing the hype, if you hold the throne we should all bend at the knee.
Ur so used to dickryding on HF, that you still owe hush money to jin the emcee.
I don't get this either but I wasn't on HF so I'll reserve any judgements

Glad you dropped. Overall I think you need to take more time with your concepts and not worry about doing anything crazy - just worry about getting the punch across to your reader

[Eviction]

Originally Posted by sharp

From lifetime bans to free wins, guess this vet is no longer the guest of honor.
He used to be the shit, but he's more out of practice than Vanessa's daughter.
I just don't get this. If you're referencing a show or movie it helps to include it somewhere so people like me know what to google. Literally just saying

vanessa = kobe's wife, her daughter also died in the helicopter crash.

[Sharp]

Originally Posted by Eviction

vanessa = kobe's wife, her daughter also died in the helicopter crash.

Thanks for clarifying. so my feed stands. There is no way I would have gotten that from your bar