Paragraph Re-up

CopyPat · 04-05-2013, 02:30 AM

The single most tightest typing this text. Reaching pinnacle heights, the mightiest yet. Preaching, giving advice, writing with depth. Speaking cynical like I don’t like what you said. I’m ripe with success, enlighten the rest leading pitiful lives, like they depressed. I visualize life at its best. Consider it wise. Why would you stress? Just minimalize, try to relax. The limit is high, the sky isn’t black. I’m finished with guys supplying an act and woman disguised and hiding the facts. Cause lying is wack, it cripples your path. That’s why society has such a pitiful chance. The rioting acts begin to advance, but the crime and the wrath it is in your hands. Why isn't that abundantly clear? Your mind is a channel funneling fear. I’m guzzling beer, reflecting on life. Considering whiskey the rest of the time. I’m suddenly here, checkin the mic, fittingly tipsy at the end of the night.

Zen · 04-05-2013, 01:44 PM

Pretty good little piece here man. I've only seen another person on here use the paragraph style lol. But really I can't actually see anything wrong with this. The flow was perfect, it rolled right off my tongue and I actually think putting it in a paragraph was a better idea and worked great for this. Props. If I was gonna give a little advice the only thing I would say is use more creative vocabulary because you have everything else down perfectly. Nice drop man I'm gonna peep your next drop for sure.

KennyCerealBowl · 04-05-2013, 07:09 PM

Your scheme was sooo dope! It kinda reminded me of kendrick lamar. really really dope yo
and you had a dope phrase " The limit is high, the sky isn't black" I thoroughly enjoyed the piece keep writting!!

Vulgar · 04-05-2013, 08:33 PM

"Cause lying is wack, it cripples your path. That’s why society has such a pitiful chance. The rioting acts begin to advance, but the crime and the wrath it is in your hands."

Nice, Copy. Overall this keystyle was chill. You don't seem rusty.

Lars · 04-06-2013, 08:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vulgar

"Cause lying is wack, it cripples your path. That’s why society has such a pitiful chance. The rioting acts begin to advance, but the crime and the wrath it is in your hands."

Nice, Copy. Overall this keystyle was chill. You don't seem rusty.

thought that was the best section too

super slick

Plot · 04-06-2013, 01:08 AM

My lord this scheme is ill.
Copy your shit is sick, I read every drop you drop.. don't feed that often
but please don't stop writing coz shits crazy.

Zombie · 04-06-2013, 02:36 AM

Few eyes open. Chakra stream.

CopyPat · 04-15-2013, 02:39 PM

thanks bro's!

04-05-2013, 02:30 AM	#1
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	Paragraph Re-up The single most tightest typing this text. Reaching pinnacle heights, the mightiest yet. Preaching, giving advice, writing with depth. Speaking cynical like I don’t like what you said. I’m ripe with success, enlighten the rest leading pitiful lives, like they depressed. I visualize life at its best. Consider it wise. Why would you stress? Just minimalize, try to relax. The limit is high, the sky isn’t black. I’m finished with guys supplying an act and woman disguised and hiding the facts. Cause lying is wack, it cripples your path. That’s why society has such a pitiful chance. The rioting acts begin to advance, but the crime and the wrath it is in your hands. Why isn't that abundantly clear? Your mind is a channel funneling fear. I’m guzzling beer, reflecting on life. Considering whiskey the rest of the time. I’m suddenly here, checkin the mic, fittingly tipsy at the end of the night.

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04-05-2013, 01:44 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Pretty good little piece here man. I've only seen another person on here use the paragraph style lol. But really I can't actually see anything wrong with this. The flow was perfect, it rolled right off my tongue and I actually think putting it in a paragraph was a better idea and worked great for this. Props. If I was gonna give a little advice the only thing I would say is use more creative vocabulary because you have everything else down perfectly. Nice drop man I'm gonna peep your next drop for sure.

04-05-2013, 07:09 PM	#3
KennyCerealBowl Do what is right. Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 769 Rep Power: 954121	Your scheme was sooo dope! It kinda reminded me of kendrick lamar. really really dope yo and you had a dope phrase " The limit is high, the sky isn't black" I thoroughly enjoyed the piece keep writting!!

04-05-2013, 08:33 PM	#4
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	"Cause lying is wack, it cripples your path. That’s why society has such a pitiful chance. The rioting acts begin to advance, but the crime and the wrath it is in your hands." Nice, Copy. Overall this keystyle was chill. You don't seem rusty.

04-06-2013, 01:08 AM	#6
Plot Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,374 Battle Record: 26-32 Rep Power: 1309744	My lord this scheme is ill. Copy your shit is sick, I read every drop you drop.. don't feed that often but please don't stop writing coz shits crazy.

04-06-2013, 02:36 AM	#7
Zombie Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 125 Battle Record: 5-0 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 2645340	Few eyes open. Chakra stream.

04-15-2013, 02:39 PM	#8
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	thanks bro's!