Week 5: Incredible (2-2) vs. FGR (2-2) - FGR WINS

[Blue Bayou]

NBL Season XIV

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@Incredible
@FGR

[FGR]

Going ten buddy

[Incredible]

Sent 10

[FGR]

No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller
You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight
I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame
I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded
I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement



@Blue Bayou post his 10 n open this for votes plz

[Blue Bayou]

Incs Verse

Originally Posted by FGR in 2014

i was a addict since i was 16yrs old to about 25.. now ive been clean 3 years.. maybe something u should change cuz theres nothing 'lol' about getting high. i loss 7 friends to that shit.. n my uncle was shot in the face twice last week for a bad drug deal he was 33

Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him
crying uncle like its 6 years ago
Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery
1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line
Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse
His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!


10

[Wanderer]

FGR

Instincts decent, lead paint ur crib was ok and opener was ok at best... overall very nameplay / wordplay concept heavy, wouldn’t have minded a few different ideas but the verse was ok

Vs

Incredible

Your opener was ok but other than that I wasn’t feeling much. Contact delivery had potential just didn’t quite connect for me. Overall I preferred a few of your lines last week over any of this .

So I’ve got FGR with a few more quotes and probably “Instincts” as LOTB here...

Vote FGR

[Answer]

No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller

lol this is simple but it's witty, funny, and relevant to current events in the league. I thought it was a good opener 8.5/10

You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight

Overall this is solid, the biggest drawback is it doesn't strike me as super original. Still worded well and lands as a solid job. 7.5/10

I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame

Again decent, execution is passable but I just get the feeling this bar's lacking a little something extra. 7.5/10

I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded

Nah, this is okay but to be honest the lead/gun thing has been done a lot and I do like the lead paint angle you took, but I just feel like the overall execution on this could've been improved on. 7.5/10

I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement

Nah. I made this comment when I voted on your last battle, you can't just butcher the way things are pronounced to get them to fit into your wordplay. Know your audience. I'm an active voter and I'll be making this same comment again next week if you do it again. 6/10

37/50 ==> 74%


Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him crying uncle like its 6 years ago

This is an effective personal, I just think you could be a bit more out of the box with the angle here. 7/10

Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery

This is a clever concept, though I personally generally prefer the set-up and punch to be in the same line. It feels a little dragged out for me. 7.5/10

1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line

Nah. I mean, dissing him for losing to a cum line could be an angle that works if it's funny enough, but I think the execution here could've used more work. It's a miss for me. 6/10

Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse

Lol I'll probably be biased on this bar right off the bat because it applies to me, but I thought this was pretty funny. 8.5/10

His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!

Punches and Pontius is a bit of a stretch, though it is more acceptable to me than the macadam and mac at em wordplay. I just think this a bit more on the obscure side and not likely to land. You get creativity points, though. 7.5/10

36.5 / 50 ==> 73%


Overall, I thought this was fairly close and I can see it going either way. Favorite bar from FGR was his opener and favorite from Incredible was the load in your face bar. I think if I were to sum this battle up, I'd say that Incredible had the better ideas and most of the angles he took were fresh and/or relevant, but FGR was just more polished in terms of how he executes and words his bars. I think if Incredible swapped out the blue bayou line out with something a little bit stronger, I would've been leaning his way. That being said, FGR takes this by a thin margin with smoother implementation of his bars. FGR has proven he knows how to execute his ideas well, I just really don't want to see any more of these strappado or macadam bars from him in the future.

MVGT - FGR

[Adverse]

FGR:
No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller
^ Wasn't the most ferocious opener I've ever seen but kinda funny and good callback to a recent event.

You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight
^ I liked this one, decent hit.

I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame
^ this one was okay as well, not a haymaker but a good jab

I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded
^ lol i like this one, it felt fresh

I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement
^kindaaaa a stretch imo but a cool attempt

Inc:
Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him
crying uncle like its 6 years ago
^ Damn came out swinging below the belt lol it's a good punch, think it could have been worded better but what you did didn't sour it too much for me.

Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery
^ this sucks because i see mad potential here but you just didn't connect

1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line
^ another good attempt that just suffers from a wording aspect

Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse
^ lol okay

His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!
^ kinda a stretch here, just another case of good attempt but didn't really connect.

I think Inc had some awesome ideas but they weren't executed well, I've seen better from FGR buuuut he landed a few jabs here and put enough space between him and his opponent here to walk away from this with a win. Good bout gents

V/FGR

[Flow]

No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller
meh jab
You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight
ok jab
I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame
miss, no one calls him red, middle of a name name flip is always reaching, plus seen this done on cred
I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded
lmao this was so funny to me, probably lotb an not even read inc's yet
I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement
lol hits but bit left field

Vs

Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him
crying uncle like its 6 years ago
cool personal, probably could of done more with it but it hits as it is
Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery
like the idea, bit off for me way you've executed it
1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line
lol nice attempt at a personal, bonus for trying but not a hit here
Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse
like you've done your research. This was ok
His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!
again well done on research. Impressed. This is a meh jab


Overall pretty even but I definitely think FGRs was more direct and had the lotb with that lead paint bar which proper tickled me. Incredible definitely put the research in an went for the personal angles which I think was worthy of a mention but sadly just didn't execute them harshly or direct enough here to win

Vote FGR

[slecht]

Originally Posted by FGR

No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller
You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight
I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame
I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded
I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement



@Blue Bayou post his 10 n open this for votes plz

vs

No one wants to read your lame lines. this dude is a weak brawler
Voters avoiding ur battles so much next week Blue will make the mag even smaller
-Decent jab.
You drop lame punches! No members here think that your shit is tight
It's safe to say instincts, and I'd use mine to bet your losing this fight
-OK.
I'm the better writer here. You can't compare mine and his name
As soon as I discredit puts him or anything he's ever accomplished to shame
-Slight reach but cool flip.
I'm praying you want beef.. cuz I got the goons strapped in the car ready to start it
Roll down the window n let the lead paint ya crib until your kids end up retarded
-NO.
I let that heatwave like mexican summers.. I'm not someone you should engage wit
I'll squeeze the macadam until it becomes ironic that he's hitting the pavement
-BOTR

Originally Posted by Blue Bayou

Incs Verse




Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him
crying uncle like its 6 years ago
Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery
1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line
Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse
His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!


10

Spent money to get dope can't pull them tricks here tho
Words turn to attempted murder have him
crying uncle like its 6 years ago
-No.
Makes trips for extra income my cash is so stacked literally
That phrase was confusing until I saw ur video battle, that's no contact delivery
-Ok personal but not feeling it.
1-2 u lost to a jizz concept and ur girl gets soothed from mine
Holding it back but couldn't manage, bitch laying defeated.....Blue cum line
-No.
Had asked the ho, u swallow or spit? Said "was thinking ur pants or my skirt"
So I dropped a load right in her face for not responding like a Answer verse
-No
His feedback last week was "I had no sting" "no punches here"
No Pontius where? I got a mean cross that'll Pilate u out the fkn stratosphere!!
-No



This goes to FGR. His hits were direct and just more aggresive. I felt like Inc was rushed and his wording lacked the impact. FGR had some cool jabs in there which made him take this W. I wasn't really digging the retarded line but other than that, I enjoyed the read. As far as Inc - I want you to step it up. This seemed almost like a keystyle. I hope I'm wrong. Hope to catch y'all in the season.

[Letterman]

Instincts

Vs

Closer had potential

I’ve seen better from both. Inc’s best attempt to me was the closer and I think it could’ve been done a lot better. FGR has the instincts bar which was good & also a couple other concepts that were ok, just not put together as well as they could’ve been. I got him taking this tho.

v/FGR

[Blue Bayou]

Fgr wins