WK 8: DMS 1-0 vs. Cereal 1-1 - DMS WINS!!

[Incredible]

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due FRIDAY JUNE 29th! and will be open until Sunday.
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

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• 1st Person can edit until his opponent drops
• 2nd Person can edit until the first vote is posted

Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

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@DMS @Cereal

[DMS]

Wanna go 10 lines or naw?

[Cereal]

def 10

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=128500

[Cereal]

i stopped dms for a dui, no surprise there..
but the nigger was dressed worse then the cut from one night in.. Paris's Hair
or maybe it was britney spears social network got me forget..
like i run around with hit me up DMS just to connect..
i be turning myspace until i grind out the dot
i plan to rot so my plot is futile against a cat that got stuck on capital LOCKED
this boyo is turn-UP i be surprised if it holds urnings
dudes so loco locomotives are scarred from its love in coal burning..
so ima drop a dime in thought like the wording holds water..
because it only follows footsteps like a pig to the slaughter

[DMS]

Yo

I send fools lit up, if your style a mess n sloppy
I’ll treat you like a fireman. When the building getting lit I ketch some bodies
He was cocky last battle he had, Incred was speedin past tho.
I guess he loves da milk things like Fidel Castro.
Judging by your rep tiles, the fact your a cake’s gone out boy
I’ll have this slitherin snake’s hair white, Draco Malfo.
On New Years, Cereal tried a drop n faded.
I did a 360, now it’s Boxing Day bitch
Time to end this, and I had his head in a few.
That was the second time you were pummeled by an incredible dude.

[Incredible]

Cereal:

"so ima drop a dime in thought like the wording holds water..
because it only follows footsteps like a pig to the slaughter"

DMS:

"Judging by your rep tiles, the fact your a cake’s gone out boy
I’ll have this slitherin snake’s hair white, Draco Malfo"


Overall not much going on here in this battle. Both had only decent attempts. Cereal needs to focus more on punches and how they hit, most your wording was not good. DMS seems to be getting the hang of it, structure wise still needs some work. And DMS while I appreciate the compliment its not good to use someone else beating your opponent as a closer, possibly a first line set up if creative enough. In this case didn't think it worked well here. Ethier way props on both for showing but I got DMS....barley.

[BodySnatcher]

vote DMS


Cereal was weak sauce again. DMS had better structure and decent punches

[Twodrop]

v/ DMS

thought that Fidel line was dope, lol.
The line Incred quoted could of been cool if worded a little different...

Wasn't feeling anything from Cereal.

[Jabari Black]

i stopped dms for a dui, no surprise there..
but the nigger was dressed worse then the cut from one night in.. Paris's Hair

(....here this nigga go again....whatever. This was a very obscure reference. I googled it and found out you were talking about some rapper who doesn’t have much of a following. Gotta use references people are going to get. I still didn’t understand the punch though)

or maybe it was britney spears social network got me forget..
like i run around with hit me up DMS just to connect..

(I think this was a DMs/direct message flip. You def gotta tighten up your wording. This was a miss)

i be turning myspace until i grind out the dot
i plan to rot so my plot is futile against a cat that got stuck on capital LOCKED

(It flowed nice but your first priority gotta be crafting a punch that’s clever and makes sense. I see where you were going with the all caps in his name but most the punch means nothing and getting stuck on caps lock isn’t really a diss)

this boyo is turn-UP i be surprised if it holds urnings
dudes so loco locomotives are scarred from its love in coal burning..

(Lol come on bruh)

so ima drop a dime in thought like the wording holds water..
because it only follows footsteps like a pig to the slaughter

(The set up didn’t make since. Punch is abstract)



send fools lit up, if your style a mess n sloppy
I’ll treat you like a fireman. When the building getting lit I ketch some bodies

(This was just a jab but you already took the battle with this)

He was cocky last battle he had, Incred was speedin past tho.
I guess he loves da milk things like Fidel Castro.

(I don’t get the Castro and milk tie. This missed )

Judging by your rep tiles, the fact your a cake’s gone out boy
I’ll have this slitherin snake’s hair white, Draco Malfo.

(This wasn’t a bad attempt. Rep tiles wp works. The punch was ehh but I see where you’re going)

On New Years, Cereal tried a drop n faded.
I did a 360, now it’s Boxing Day bitch
Time to end this, and I had his head in a few.
That was the second time you were pummeled by an incredible dude.

(Someone just used this incredible flip if I’m not mistaken. Even if not, it’s too simple of a flip to really hit)


Cereal you gotta COMPLETELY overhaul your style man. Abstract lines don’t work in battles, you gotta learn how to craft punches. Also you doing too much focusing on rhyming and flow that you’re not making sense - just rhyming. Also stop saying nigger.

DMS has structure and gets the concept of how to craft punches. Nothing but took this easily. Keep improving bro - you got the basics down.

MVGT DMS

[Blue Bayou]

Nothing

Vs.

The slitherin Bar


Keep at it dudes... DMS won for the only prob quotable line in the battle, and his wording was vastly superior

DMS