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Old 05-01-2018, 08:58 PM   #1
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I cruise the city in a dark knight mood
vigilante, showing no pity shit to ya'll type goons
and my manic emotions triples when the dark pass thru
camera believed to caught the hawk part that dude
jaw stuck, then zip-line, stars struck, across the moon is a symbol
like bats - I move to the signal, of bad news and the critical
- conditions risen, criminal ambitions
where crime pays to the predators and system
the crying prey.... for the helpless? my dampened vision
to take matters in my own hands and sand my prints then
cannibalism, news channels with victims
quicker to play God than to sit around channeling scriptures
a animal stamina, handling liquor- I'm pumped up like Budden
I'm like the key to success, gassed with a drive, push my buttons
that's a push to start, I remember groceries, home, mom pushing carts
now eating booty like groceries with fly divas with push up bras
Sike, I lied, I know your face flipped like a SideKick 5
I let em read my future kids in they face like psychic minds
then she kneedeep swolla's and the dark night returns
and we repeat Gotham while the bad guys emerge
like this DC Comics, but will justice be served
fuck PG authors following Justice League terms
I'm the dusted jeans, cuffed and re-worked with a sag
you can trust my genes, rugged G, dirt as your sack
she could prolly thug motivate when she polish what procreates
her oval eggs that hatched and gave birth to a basterd that's worth a parolee's fate
and was neglected, abandoned through those negative standards
potential to be the best villain - Heath Ledger - Batman film
and with every villain there's a hero
I'm some where in between, tug-o-warrin' good and evil
Conscious like You in this dark night, own it
"While overlookin' my city, had a Dark Knight moment" - King Los sample

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Old 05-02-2018, 04:10 PM   #2
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@Genocide Whatchu think fam?
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Old 05-02-2018, 05:06 PM   #3
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Old 05-02-2018, 08:12 PM   #5
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Had its moments man.
I mean some words were used very poorly as far as placemwnt and meaning imo. But it has a certain swag yo it that i dig at times.

I think you should try to dumb down the vocab and make it.more simple. Not that vocab is bad. Just that ive learned over time that some of the simplest lines have the most impact. If that makes sense. Good shit man. Thanks
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