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ACTIVATE SELF · 01-15-2018, 11:28 PM

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ACTIVATE SELF · 01-26-2018, 12:04 AM

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Lyriscologist · 01-26-2018, 12:55 AM

digging it..! content is solid for the most part, that war on the marines scheme was the besr part.. really smoothe flow throughout most of the piece, only places where the flow lacks to me is where you shorten up the rhymescheme.. like the shia leboeuf, try ya luck scheme.. if ya kept at least a 4 to 5 syllable multi (preferably 5) then it structurally it would be solid as fuk.. only other thing is some of the multis are off.. solid piece overall though!

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01-26-2018, 12:04 AM	#2
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01-26-2018, 12:55 AM	#3
Lyriscologist Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 101 Rep Power: 95181	digging it..! content is solid for the most part, that war on the marines scheme was the besr part.. really smoothe flow throughout most of the piece, only places where the flow lacks to me is where you shorten up the rhymescheme.. like the shia leboeuf, try ya luck scheme.. if ya kept at least a 4 to 5 syllable multi (preferably 5) then it structurally it would be solid as fuk.. only other thing is some of the multis are off.. solid piece overall though!