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He turned the key in the lock and opened the door. To his horror, he saw…
The feet of his mom’s, as he stopped at the door Seemingly shocked, I was lost in the pause as her bottle was pouring, my mind was aghast She wanted the story of the night that I’d had The silence would last, as I think what to do whilst hiding the stash, so its hidden from view. The lips wouldn’t move in her wondering look I’d shift to the room as I uttered ‘Its done’ Stunning me shook, uncomfortably numb Dumped in the brook, Her body clumsily crooked, inside the luggage, blugeonedly stuffed I covered her up in the dustiest rug, covered in soot, soaking up the loveliest blood She mumbled and gushed, as I shoveled her up with a troublesome look, befuddled and bugged She discovered my drugs, in one of my books She flushed it, mistook it for rubbish I punished her good, until I no longer was on the hook I was too stubborn to look at how my evil unfolded cutting her up in the heat of the moment no real emotion as I start cleaning the knife I needed to focus on concealing my fright I was weeping inside and my mind was gone I needed to hide as the time went on her lifeless body had never left my sight my sight was groggy and left me sensitized But her severed thighs left me mesmerized, rectifying my floppy I set her dress aside, eyeing her body with sexual intentions I called over my posse They answered their cell phones early in the morning like aspiring zombies Mate "Remember the time, you said you had the hots for my mommy?" Lip balm on her balmy mouth, he removed her blotchy stockings with awful desire Nonchalantly, hardly desensitized over her flat lining heartbeat The director rises, decrepit, fondly, impressed by everbody involved He calmy calls for the Lars scene, ending it promptly
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LMAO FUNNY SHIT BRUHS!
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Meh
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some crazy rhyming in here yessir.
a decent demented story, but the flow and rhymes take the cake! and f.y.i. Frank pharaoh says he always write and submit his votes before he reads other people's, so sometimes it can look like he's more of an ass than he already is. Good work, the both of you |
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I thought this was pretty funny.
you have a cool set up to the ending & it worked out nicely both of you work well together, quite lovely. the mid section was pretty cool & the ending was the most likely... outcome...this battle would have been cool to see. a lot of battles would have been nice though...*sigh* nice work fellas
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