Defining

Gina · 04-25-2016, 10:58 PM

All definitions are divisions.
I can give you my undivided, if you don't ruin the moment by defining the minute.
Don't waste my time with exhibits, or other people's business, just ask me what I know about quantum physics.

I'm always ready for what comes up in my mission.
We can start war and bring peace back to earth, if that's what you want just give me the vision and I'll write up the blueprints

sral · 04-29-2016, 07:09 AM

No, bruh.

emcee squared · 04-29-2016, 01:15 PM

nothing is illusion. just fission. and diplomacy. you'll be ready, when the moment is, but the moment is more than measuring minutes, you'll notice it. war crimes. in Your time. differences, 'tween gandhi &Milosevic..
multiplicity is not unity. instinctual inter-personal skills &acuity does not afford immunity.. negative statements
in logic class, are not positive facts
an obvious knack, for describing, the moment has passed.

Pharaohs Army · 05-06-2016, 04:54 AM

U know what Gina?, I think this is good.
And from the looks of it it must have inspired part of me to write a little verse.

On the face of it your writing here looks simple, but it's not simple-- you had attention to details/flow, etc.

Also good because (to me) it can be kind of spoken, or actually rapped.

I read this as definitely out of the pocket (slightly behind or ahead of the beat). Welcome to the club; it gets lonely around here, but I shall have to read more pieces by other people before I speak too soon.
(I mean, I write/rap both ways, but I think I employ out-of more than in-pocket).

As you can tell I have been mainly commenting positively on the style.
Content? On it's face it's not earth-shattering emotion, nor is it a narrative..
Maybe just a blueprint
But a cryptic line like We can start war and bring peace back to earth gives the reader some wiggle room for interpretation. Or at the very least gives off an aura of depth lol.

*Edit: But if you keyed this in 2minutes trying to be a typical textstyler then you mind as well let me know right now so I can quit life.

&Glad you found some humor in my discussion-thread female Battle mockup.

04-25-2016, 10:58 PM	#1
Gina Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 129 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Defining All definitions are divisions. I can give you my undivided, if you don't ruin the moment by defining the minute. Don't waste my time with exhibits, or other people's business, just ask me what I know about quantum physics. I'm always ready for what comes up in my mission. We can start war and bring peace back to earth, if that's what you want just give me the vision and I'll write up the blueprints

04-29-2016, 07:09 AM	#2
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	No, bruh. __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

05-06-2016, 04:54 AM	#4
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	U know what Gina?, I think this is good. And from the looks of it it must have inspired part of me to write a little verse. On the face of it your writing here looks simple, but it's not simple-- you had attention to details/flow, etc. Also good because (to me) it can be kind of spoken, or actually rapped. I read this as definitely out of the pocket (slightly behind or ahead of the beat). Welcome to the club; it gets lonely around here, but I shall have to read more pieces by other people before I speak too soon. (I mean, I write/rap both ways, but I think I employ out-of more than in-pocket). As you can tell I have been mainly commenting positively on the style. Content? On it's face it's not earth-shattering emotion, nor is it a narrative.. Maybe just a blueprint But a cryptic line like We can start war and bring peace back to earth gives the reader some wiggle room for interpretation. Or at the very least gives off an aura of depth lol. Edit: But if you keyed this in 2minutes trying to be a typical textstyler then you mind as well let me know right now so I can quit life. &Glad you found some humor in my discussion-thread female Battle mockup. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 05-06-2016 at 04:56 AM.*

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04-29-2016, 01:15 PM	#3
emcee squared senior writer Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 437 Rep Power: 0	nothing is illusion. just fission. and diplomacy. you'll be ready, when the moment is, but the moment is more than measuring minutes, you'll notice it. war crimes. in Your time. differences, 'tween gandhi &Milosevic.. multiplicity is not unity. instinctual inter-personal skills &acuity does not afford immunity.. negative statements in logic class, are not positive facts an obvious knack, for describing, the moment has passed.