Letter To My Moms

MadVerbs · 01-14-2016, 03:07 PM

I was coolin in cribs while you were slavin them hours,
..was droolin on bibs & you never caved in or coward.
When in need of ah lift, you gave them with power..
ah seed to ah kid, no kid now but I'm makin this tower!
Tryna make mother proud, cause she slowed up her act
& dealt with other crowds to put clothes on my back.
I love her now as much as I did in tha past,
from rougher ground to livin in laughs.
So, for every moment ya spent in ya zone for ya cents,
I'll give back wit ah big pad.. make it ya home with no rent!
That's tha least I could do, cause..
Through all tha pain & tha hurt, you barely complained 'bout ya work..
everyday was tha same, you'd slave for tha first.
To pay bills for our place, & place meals on our plate..
so before I let you down I'll put my skills on ah page.
Get ah deal, hit tha stage.. better my wrongs as ah kid
& mom I know you're as strong as it gets but still I'm amazed.
Cause see, there ain't ah person alive I look at tha same.
You were first in my sight, gave me looks & ah name.
There were times I'd be hurtin at night.. uncertain, in fright
but you'd b workin tha fight that never worsened, it died.
I mean, you gave me advice before I needed your thoughts..
now I know it plays in tha role of leading your spot.
So believe it or not, you taught right from wrongs
& how to exceed to tha top.. though tha flight is long
I'll succeed & won't stop until I'm weak & I drop.
These are things that I say, so it's ah fact that ukno.
So, I hope that you've heard.. & get that I owe you tha earth.
I know it's not much, but I wrote you some words to show you your worth.

Letter To My Moms.
Leave REAL feedback & any advice you have that'd help better this piece.

Ghost1 · 01-14-2016, 07:14 PM

Ur mothers a fagot

Void · 01-14-2016, 10:33 PM

You have two moms?

sral · 01-19-2016, 03:46 AM

you absolutely butchered my style

this is how it isnt done

@MMLP

MMLP · 01-19-2016, 03:56 AM

harder than it looks

Darius Da Terrible · 01-19-2016, 11:36 AM

The fact that you writing a letter to ya moms is dope can't fuck with that. rhymes and flows was good but kinda on the surface too much that they don't seem sincere. I know u might just be trying to be direct and shit. Like maybe dig deeper next time you write personal shit like this. Don't stay at the surface of it. thats ya mom and everybody feel like this about they mom. But you gotta make us care that it's "your" mom. Hope you get what i'm saying

Quarter O · 01-20-2016, 03:53 PM

I saw nothing wrong with this. Better than the average. A letter to Ya momz but with skills shown. Can't even hate on this.

JESODIST · 01-22-2016, 12:12 AM

Hey mama this Verse is Dedicated for You,
Who knows about the Worse that we be Going Through these Ages Renewed,
Hoping that the best is yet to come we Notice its True,
Delight at the site when we Scoping the Blue,
We are fed lies but the real be Knowing the Truth,
After a Focused Review of everything wrong we be harvesting the Grounded Fruit,
Harnessing the Elixer of Life, painting pictures with words the Scripture is Nice,
Facts sharp like the Tip Of a Knife, till we overcome the Drift and the Strife,
Living with the Sickest of Wife, amazing the way every Script is Devised,
That you think every Spit is Revised two times Before its Posted,
Caz after its dropped every Emcee is Roasted burnt to a Toast,
Like you heard we be Absurd like Most just Observe when they Boast,
Mama I am thank full for the struggle you Had to Surpass,
Learning your position taking Commands from the Boss,
Better put some Salt on that Sauce before you Serve it to Mass,
applying lessons which we Learnt in the Class,
Am unreachable like Undiscovered Galaxies,
Resting on the throne I just Observe your Fallacies,
And think to myself you are not Worth the Anarchies,
Provoked by the Lyrics I Compose are Swift like Breeze so cold making your Spirit Freeze,
This is like target practice and you get Hit with Ease,
You wanna Compete but Please notice that our Levels are Light Years Apart,
We Smight Peers with Darts Tearing their Hearts Blazing in Parts for not Trailing the Art,
we shine the light to others that be There in the Dark awaiting a Spark,
that will free them from that Cage where they At,
We are thankful for all the Affection you've Given Attention to Children,

MadVerbs · 01-25-2016, 03:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sraL

you absolutely butchered my style

this is how it isnt done

@MMLP

Lets hope you write as good as that ego makes you seem, otherwise ya just another fool talking out tha ass.

sral · 01-26-2016, 10:41 AM

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122117

you love my style faggot

MadVerbs · 01-26-2016, 03:22 PM

That's dope, but ya trippin think tha style's yours. You're just another person using it. Similar styles but our approach to writing is different.

Diablo · 01-26-2016, 04:03 PM

Show me who else here rhymes with that dual-rhyme scheme right the way through their verses?

there's Lars and there's his homie @MMLP

I don't see anyone else doing it. Apart from you. Leave them British niggas alone, b

MadVerbs · 01-26-2016, 04:13 PM

Ahaha aiight

Online, he can claim tha style all he wants.

I was talkin bigger picture.

Diablo · 01-26-2016, 05:08 PM

so you not gonna name anybody that does that?

01-14-2016, 03:07 PM	#1
MadVerbs Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 7 Rep Power: 0	Letter To My Moms I was coolin in cribs while you were slavin them hours, ..was droolin on bibs & you never caved in or coward. When in need of ah lift, you gave them with power.. ah seed to ah kid, no kid now but I'm makin this tower! Tryna make mother proud, cause she slowed up her act & dealt with other crowds to put clothes on my back. I love her now as much as I did in tha past, from rougher ground to livin in laughs. So, for every moment ya spent in ya zone for ya cents, I'll give back wit ah big pad.. make it ya home with no rent! That's tha least I could do, cause.. Through all tha pain & tha hurt, you barely complained 'bout ya work.. everyday was tha same, you'd slave for tha first. To pay bills for our place, & place meals on our plate.. so before I let you down I'll put my skills on ah page. Get ah deal, hit tha stage.. better my wrongs as ah kid & mom I know you're as strong as it gets but still I'm amazed. Cause see, there ain't ah person alive I look at tha same. You were first in my sight, gave me looks & ah name. There were times I'd be hurtin at night.. uncertain, in fright but you'd b workin tha fight that never worsened, it died. I mean, you gave me advice before I needed your thoughts.. now I know it plays in tha role of leading your spot. So believe it or not, you taught right from wrongs & how to exceed to tha top.. though tha flight is long I'll succeed & won't stop until I'm weak & I drop. These are things that I say, so it's ah fact that ukno. So, I hope that you've heard.. & get that I owe you tha earth. I know it's not much, but I wrote you some words to show you your worth. Letter To My Moms. Leave REAL feedback & any advice you have that'd help better this piece.

01-19-2016, 03:46 AM	#4
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	you absolutely butchered my style this is how it isnt done @MMLP __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

01-22-2016, 12:12 AM	#8
JESODIST Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 308 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 976839	Hey mama this Verse is Dedicated for You, Who knows about the Worse that we be Going Through these Ages Renewed, Hoping that the best is yet to come we Notice its True, Delight at the site when we Scoping the Blue, We are fed lies but the real be Knowing the Truth, After a Focused Review of everything wrong we be harvesting the Grounded Fruit, Harnessing the Elixer of Life, painting pictures with words the Scripture is Nice, Facts sharp like the Tip Of a Knife, till we overcome the Drift and the Strife, Living with the Sickest of Wife, amazing the way every Script is Devised, That you think every Spit is Revised two times Before its Posted, Caz after its dropped every Emcee is Roasted burnt to a Toast, Like you heard we be Absurd like Most just Observe when they Boast, Mama I am thank full for the struggle you Had to Surpass, Learning your position taking Commands from the Boss, Better put some Salt on that Sauce before you Serve it to Mass, applying lessons which we Learnt in the Class, Am unreachable like Undiscovered Galaxies, Resting on the throne I just Observe your Fallacies, And think to myself you are not Worth the Anarchies, Provoked by the Lyrics I Compose are Swift like Breeze so cold making your Spirit Freeze, This is like target practice and you get Hit with Ease, You wanna Compete but Please notice that our Levels are Light Years Apart, We Smight Peers with Darts Tearing their Hearts Blazing in Parts for not Trailing the Art, we shine the light to others that be There in the Dark awaiting a Spark, that will free them from that Cage where they At, We are thankful for all the Affection you've Given Attention to Children, Last edited by JESODIST; 01-27-2016 at 01:09 AM.

01-26-2016, 10:41 AM	#10
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122117 you love my style faggot __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

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01-14-2016, 10:33 PM	#3
Void Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 221 Rep Power: 0	You have two moms?

01-19-2016, 03:56 AM	#5
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	harder than it looks

01-19-2016, 11:36 AM	#6
Darius Da Terrible Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 13 Rep Power: 0	The fact that you writing a letter to ya moms is dope can't fuck with that. rhymes and flows was good but kinda on the surface too much that they don't seem sincere. I know u might just be trying to be direct and shit. Like maybe dig deeper next time you write personal shit like this. Don't stay at the surface of it. thats ya mom and everybody feel like this about they mom. But you gotta make us care that it's "your" mom. Hope you get what i'm saying

01-20-2016, 03:53 PM	#7
Quarter O Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 109 Rep Power: 0	I saw nothing wrong with this. Better than the average. A letter to Ya momz but with skills shown. Can't even hate on this.

01-26-2016, 03:22 PM	#11
MadVerbs Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 7 Rep Power: 0	That's dope, but ya trippin think tha style's yours. You're just another person using it. Similar styles but our approach to writing is different.

01-26-2016, 04:03 PM	#12
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,633 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	Show me who else here rhymes with that dual-rhyme scheme right the way through their verses? there's Lars and there's his homie @MMLP I don't see anyone else doing it. Apart from you. Leave them British niggas alone, b

01-26-2016, 04:13 PM	#13
MadVerbs Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 7 Rep Power: 0	Ahaha aiight Online, he can claim tha style all he wants. I was talkin bigger picture.

01-26-2016, 05:08 PM	#14
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,633 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	so you not gonna name anybody that does that?