T.I.M.E.

Mr. J · 02-06-2016, 12:21 AM

My world is a ballerina in a snow globe, an undeveloped photo
My lines lead me to the Bermuda, Ill tutor you hos though
when the OM was in a funk, I fed each piece dipping into Lazarus
after us, after me, there was no one none of these bastards trust
loose lips sank ships & you looking like a dike fucker...
while my finger slips & flicks up take it how you like fucker
just look at how you write fucker, compared to me you aint nice fucker
spent years in this rap thing managing to be the most consistent
I control commitment even when I dont try to flow this shit...
whoa...this kid....those misfits...you know....those dipshits...
its ridicliss...ridiculous? what the fuck ever Im bored off my rocker
bowls of betty crocker you see them prints? Freddie gotcha
rolling in the mystery machine shaggy on antihistamines
writers like to crack jokes but when the mask off it aint shit to me
silly me, philly cheese, fuck making sense this shit is free

Tre The ABC Darian · 02-06-2016, 05:16 PM

this isnt bad ... i read it like a poem ,,, i especially ljke the way it started ... and i like the trick wording towards the end

Mr. J · 03-01-2016, 02:26 PM

heh...finals

Geno · 03-01-2016, 04:27 PM

Mostly about your dedication to the game. Respect for it. I remember the endless mr j responses lol. And you always been one of the most consistent. There was a time when i was to, but im gettibg old and tired man. If i aint writing to a beat behind a mic in the booth.. then it just feels like a waste of time anymore. I aint gettin no younger.. keep writing.

Alice White · 03-01-2016, 06:50 PM

Nice work here. Thought that the beginning along with the mystery machine were the highlights of this verse. I can tell you were rather playing around with this, I really like the approach you took with the overall concept of the appreciation of your work. Rhyme scheme was also nice, good work overall!

02-06-2016, 12:21 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	T.I.M.E. My world is a ballerina in a snow globe, an undeveloped photo My lines lead me to the Bermuda, Ill tutor you hos though when the OM was in a funk, I fed each piece dipping into Lazarus after us, after me, there was no one none of these bastards trust loose lips sank ships & you looking like a dike fucker... while my finger slips & flicks up take it how you like fucker just look at how you write fucker, compared to me you aint nice fucker spent years in this rap thing managing to be the most consistent I control commitment even when I dont try to flow this shit... whoa...this kid....those misfits...you know....those dipshits... its ridicliss...ridiculous? what the fuck ever Im bored off my rocker bowls of betty crocker you see them prints? Freddie gotcha rolling in the mystery machine shaggy on antihistamines writers like to crack jokes but when the mask off it aint shit to me silly me, philly cheese, fuck making sense this shit is free __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

03-01-2016, 02:26 PM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	heh...finals __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

03-01-2016, 04:27 PM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Mostly about your dedication to the game. Respect for it. I remember the endless mr j responses lol. And you always been one of the most consistent. There was a time when i was to, but im gettibg old and tired man. If i aint writing to a beat behind a mic in the booth.. then it just feels like a waste of time anymore. I aint gettin no younger.. keep writing. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

03-01-2016, 06:50 PM	#5
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	Nice work here. Thought that the beginning along with the mystery machine were the highlights of this verse. I can tell you were rather playing around with this, I really like the approach you took with the overall concept of the appreciation of your work. Rhyme scheme was also nice, good work overall! __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

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02-06-2016, 05:16 PM	#2
Tre The ABC Darian Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2016 Posts: 17 Rep Power: 2010585	this isnt bad ... i read it like a poem ,,, i especially ljke the way it started ... and i like the trick wording towards the end