Dead man, Wellington ave.

[dead man]

we

kissed greedily outside the bar on Wellington Ave
spit and sweat and snowflakes and the horn of a cab
our secretive dance. the distant flirt was growing perverse
settled for each other cause we've settled for worse
homeward bound. ye olde corolla put the rev in reverse
drop you off before the storm. exchanging sets to rehearse
you're a close second. i'm a competitive first
at cultivating loyalty then breaking its curse
love hurts and so does opiate withdrawal at noon
clearing out my throat so i can talk to a room
of absentees and silent, absent-minded recluses
preoccupying their uselessness. the wandering youth
so I'm talking to you. bar stools & Estee Lauder perfume
you're evidence in leggings, i've got nothing to prove
the happiness we sought is but a common pursuit
of a couple kids who rarely put their conscience to use
traveled half the world to rediscover some truth
all it gave me was a tolerance boost. vodka and juice
bourbon and water. worms to the slaughter, squirming in vain
babysit your daughter while you search for a vein
a study in redundancy: we've learned to be trained
to lust with unconditional regard for the pain
for those affected. consequence, discord, disarray
disappeared in the second that i saw you today
dishonor, betrayal, monorails, we're hailing a cab
instead of waiting for the train to stop at Wellington Ave



Dead man

[dull boy]

Really good.

[dead man]

tag-maker: PM me for prices on custom work

[Zombie]

The piece brought closure with the beginning of Wellington and ending of it! it also brought a more descriptive piece. I could see wellington on a foggy, maybe, not so foggy, dusky scenario! Maybe 1950s. Hooligan hat! London! hmmmmmmmmm.

kissed greedily outside the bar on Wellington Ave
spit and sweat and snowflakes and the horn of a cab
our secretive dance. the distant flirt was growing perverse
settled for each other cause we've settled for worse
homeward bound. ye olde corolla put the rev in reverse
drop you off before the storm. exchanging sets to rehearse
you're a close second. i'm a competitive first
at cultivating loyalty then breaking its curse
love hurts and so does opiate withdrawal at noon
clearing out my throat so i can talk to a room
of absentees and silent, absent-minded recluses
preoccupying their uselessness. the wandering youth
so I'm talking to you. bar stools & Estee Lauder perfume
you're evidence in leggings, i've got nothing to prove
the happiness we sought is but a common pursuit
of a couple kids who rarely put their conscience to use
traveled half the world to rediscover some truth
all it gave me was a tolerance boost. vodka and juice
bourbon and water. worms to the slaughter, squirming in vain
babysit your daughter while you search for a vein
a study in redundancy: we've learned to be trained
to lust with unconditional regard for the pain
for those affected. consequence, discord, disarray
disappeared in the second that i saw you today
dishonor, betrayal, monorails, we're hailing a cab
instead of waiting for the train to stop at Wellington Ave

I took the time out to highlight things for you! I liked it, some were because of the line itself, just something very eye opening, narratively unique, or just descriptive! Good job dm!!

[Geno]

Nice piece.

[Wise Wiggles]

Everything awesome. Clearing throat/talk to a room. Search for a vein. Everything dope. Everything the last 7/8s quotable. Thank you bro.

[PancakeBrah]

I read this the AOWL and thought it was very good. In your upper percentile of pieces, I think. The settle for worse, competitive first, and searching for a vein (especially) lines were the standouts to me but everything here was airtight and precise in execution. Thanks for the read.

[dead man]

i miss page 1

everyone is welcome to PM links for reciprocation and whatnot

[veritas]

It seems like this dude speaks to the other me ' s who I run into in the dream world. Props for that.

[KennyCerealBowl]

Wtf y was my feed deletrd

fuk u then nigga
edit nvm this was really good

[Bodey]

Most of this was quoteable, that's why I love your pieces, Black. I liked the Estée Lauder part too, my mom wears their make up and perfume. The description in this overall piece was amazing 10/10

[oats]

I feel like it takes me thousands of words to accomplish what you do in 16 or so couplets. The narrative arch was really unique for this kind of writing, and really effective. Great undermining of common phrases, I particularly liked the "settled for each other cuz we've settled for worse" and "all it gave me was a tolerance boost." The latter is such a perfect description for putting up with someone you genuinely don't care much for as an exchange for pussy. Time is poorly invested currency when it comes to getting a nut.

At any rate, this was dope, glad I typed the letter N on my search bar when I did.