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Old 07-17-2013, 09:47 AM   #72
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I thought your first two came off forced, really disliked Typist and I dislike even more that you capitalise the first letters of them. I get to the point of the wordplay and just know where it's going, almost instantly, I don't even need to get to the end of the line to get the punch, in my head I've already riddled it which ruins them completely for me. They're too predictable I think.

Maybe don't word them all the same way?

Maybe keep the wordplay until the end of the line?

I dunno.

I'll need to think of examples to better explain. Foreplay was your best though of those I read.
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