[PancakeBrah]

Is there no way of providing perfect timing?

I did like this thought a lot

Once you got into the verse proper I thought you had one amazing line in terms of pace and wording.

"Do you feel the full brunt of this?"

That is very good, to me. This is the type of line I would love to run with, or more likely accent a thought to transition into a new rhyme scheme.

I like your writing when it is a bit less sure. I did like that previous OM i said Nice to, I thought it was a bit more fre flowing. I prefer a less boisterous and confident Veritas verse I suppose. Interesting read.