Yeah I don't remember who said it but even saying 'like' instead of 'bitch' would have made this a significantly better punch. Wording is subtle and can make or break your bars. I kinda liked the concept but it was very poorly executed.
Vipers bar is ok to me...the imagery is what makes it work...the more you think about it, the less sense it makes...but it's ok.
Vote Viper.
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Explicit and poisonous violent crime.
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