My style of SnF is more longbar I'd guess would be a good representation. I like when someone can fit as many inners as possible into a verse and have it read back smoothly. Both of you had an interesting approach to the topic, I liked reading both. I think J did more with the space he was given, had a couple really clean schemes/segments.
A, I think you could have had a better verse with more substance. Since they are very short lines, could have written 30 to give me more of a platform to build off of. Some of the setup lines for your schemes had great flow but then kinda read weird for me in the end.
J
The swag part is v important as well need to add some grime to these
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