[Master Rock]

Exis I understood your story but I felt it was an odd scheme. The story was powerful but it didn't flow effortlessly, the format clustered the stream. Razah, your opening lines brought a powerful impact and concept wise I was feeling the connection to the nature/nurture theme. I especially like how you closed it with a connection to the beginning. In the middle of you verse your wording was a bit off which took me away from the flow. But overall you had a stronger verse, therefore I'm giving this to Razah.