Cred- Felt like this wasn’t quite up to your normal standard. Spongebob was a standout. I also liked Hinduism. 70’s show and hooks were ok. Good wording and structure as usual.
Bolo- The wording is really bad. The concepts weren’t there for me either. Nothing impactful or creative. Like the Peel his face back like Edgar from MIB...your comparing peeling his face back to someone literally peeling their face back. There’s no misdirection. The simile is just too easy. I think the Tommy gun line was the best of the verse and it swas a setup. Sorry, just not feeling it.
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