* lack of oxygen was cool (probably played on him but I liked the wording)
* Embroidery Shop was clean, could have used some clean up on the wording but I liked it
* closer would have been so much better if you would have gone with the opener as the punch and worded a little differently
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* In the box was funny
* Pepperdine was cool
* Jettsons maid was also cool, opener could have used more thought to tie it together tho
* Dine-out was a cool concept.. wording made the execution feel like it was missing something to put it over the edge
cool battle, Dynas writing is really dope but it seems more aimed at audio style. I don't think it'll take him much to convert it over to text style though, he had some great concepts that I saw. Blue was also cool, I haven't read anything from him for a few years. I don't think a lot of his stuff was fire but the consistency was great. This was a good battle to read through so I appreciate ya'll putting in the time.
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