OK, I read it. There's a lot of cool phrasing in this one, along with your patented silky flow. But I think it lacked the thread running through it that I find in your strongest work. There were times when the references were so purposefully vague that it reminded me of Split Eight's writing here. I don't have much more to say, so I'll just quote a few lines I liked.
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throwing bricks in lieu of anything constructive to do
poetic waste of a mood. broadband beatnik, sensitive muse
it's expertise. not exercise like english assumed
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modus operandi, let the drama resume
i've got nothing left to lose. only coffins to use
and i've realized, it's constant. it's a pang, it's an island
umbrellas for the pain. it's the rain, it's dysthymic
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toulouse-lautrec the resurrect. wet corpse of a sketch
metamorphic descendant of some glorious presence
gorged out in western cinema what nordics invented
rhyme contortionist message code allegorical sentence
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