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UnbornBuddha · 08-25-2016, 01:42 PM

Yes it had nice rhythm to it, some couplets were a bit strange, i.e. the aforementioned " My cheeks have shined (for weeks at times) Beneath the the streaks that leaked through eyes"
But besides that I enjoyed the fast paced rhythm of it.

08-25-2016, 01:42 PM	#4
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856375	Yes it had nice rhythm to it, some couplets were a bit strange, i.e. the aforementioned " My cheeks have shined (for weeks at times) Beneath the the streaks that leaked through eyes" But besides that I enjoyed the fast paced rhythm of it.